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 Unintended Melodramatics  [E]
"A conclusion is simply the place you grew tired of thinking."
by JoeLouisErina
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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A thoughtful, loosely gathered free verse poem that reminds me of the lines from Twenty One Pilots Ride: “help me, I’ve been thinking too much!” We all have moments when we’re stuck hopelessly philosophizing ourselves into a corner and wondering what the point of life is, and I know I’ve written plenty of meaningless gibberish on the subject myself. I see and appreciate where you're coming from, and your conclusion about what it means to approach life with maturity is a good point. The opening lines appear to be several sentences run together, but when they’re teased out and read more slowly one sees the wisdom within the words, and perhaps even realizes that this is pretty good advice.

As a personal poem stating your own inner feelings, I have very little to criticize here. Anything I might correct could be looked at as poetic license, and certainly in free verse there are no rigid structural rules to follow. I view poetry as a highly subjective art form, where we are mostly free to express our deepest thoughts and emotions in any way that we would like. This was easy to follow along with, and I liked having a look at your thoughts.


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