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Review of Earth: Lost  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This was really cool and something that we should all take to heart. You really had my interest piqued and I had to keep reading. One thing that I really loved was the detachment from the issue. The writer's words are lacking in emotion, simply a log of the day's events, and cold to what would have had to be an insane shock to the mind. This definitely gets us thinking! Thank you!
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I really like this and it didn't go anywhere I thought it would! It's very heartfelt and real, and the imagery is wonderful! Thank you for sharing!
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Review of Silent Rain  
Rated: E | (4.0)
Nice poem. It didn't go anywhere I thought it would, and I like that!!!
The questions are good and reflects the frantic thoughts in the speakers mind that related to that sadness. I think the last line might have more punch if you left out "I just lost my love." Keep the mystery going. I really did like it!
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Review of The Sound  
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
The title is intriguing, but maybe "What's that Sound?" Would have been a bit more capturing of attention. The concept is good, though the story started a little on the slow side. I would like to have seen the characters foiled more and a bit more description of the sound and the fire. The burned diploma and so forth was mentioned and then dropped. I never saw the connection. I did get a bit more into it mid-way through and thought the protagonist's injuries to be funny, though again, maybe a little back story to explain the "I need medical attention--again." would have helped. I must admit that it was quite a letdown when he moved and it started up again, though obviously you wanted the reader to see that it was him, not the apartment creating the buzz. Thanks for sharing!
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