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Review of Endless thinking  
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Rated: E | (2.5)
An interesting though disturbing story. A little difficult to read because of the choppiness, however that lends to the disturbing overall quality. I didn't understand the mirror, nor the reason the woman/nurse had to explain the story every year on the 12th of May. Seems to me in Dave's messed up mind he wouldn't have a clue about the date unless there was a trigger in his environment like seasonal decorations or some other regular annual event that would provoke the memories.

Needs a little editing for grammar and tense. Overall interesting. Keep writing!
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