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Review of 27. Backlash  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi aracrae, I came across this story while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"27. Backlash"  by aracrae

Clarity:Seems to be a good title for this chapter.

Writing style:Family thriller drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Good job, this makes your work available to more readers.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader? The structure is fair for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialog seems to be appropriate for its individual speaker.

My favorite line: ---“Just Kai.” Nail emphasizes. “And what he stole.”---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A well written drama with good descriptions that help the reader picture the scenes while trying to get into the story.

Strong characters with good individual dialogs.

Mabey just me but seemed to have too much drama. Kept loosing my attention. That's just one opinion.


aracrae, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Consider a good edit and proof read and possibly shortening or breaking down to several chapters. This will make it less intimidating for a reader. Today's readers seem to like short and to the point.

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi Chaotic Evil, I came across this story while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"I'm a girls girl... Here is why "  by Chaotic Evil

Clarity: A great title.

Writing style: Personal opinion drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, this makes your work available to more readers.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?The structure is not good for this reader.



My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: Sometimes life is just a beach. Modern society and human nature can get us all down at certain times in life.

Well told opinion article that expresses your thoughts well. Seems to be written more in a fast rant. A good edit to the format and this could be a top article revealing signs of the time.

In life everyone goes through times when it seems everything is against us. Hang in there, it gets better.

This article reveals a great talent for expressing your thoughts. Use that talent to try and fix things. Time is on your side.

Chaotic Evil, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Consider a good proof read and edit to make the format less intimidating and easier to read.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review of Sunset Melody  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)

Hi HuntersMoon, I came across this delightful psalm while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "Sunset Melody"  by HuntersMoon.

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: A great tune to this 42 line melody. This is the sunset's melody. A great idea for this awesome lullaby. No doubt a prize winner. A catchy rhyme scheme that stays with the reader. Well done.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see the portrait of a composure drifting through time while composing this classic lullaby.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I can find no problems at all with the grammar spelling or mechanics of this piece of art.

HuntersMoon, thank you for sharing this beautiful song. Write On!

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.0)

Hi Mr. Man, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
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My impressions of the poem: "If I could be anything"  by Mr. Mans

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:Strong words to this free verse poem. Wouldn't it be nice to be able to choose anything you want to be? Wait some of us can, or can we.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:The portrait of a soul altering time in a dream, is what this reader sees.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see no problems at all with the grammar spelling of mechanics.

Mr. Mans, Thank you for sharing your poem. Write On!

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Joeman199, I came across this story while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"Rivers of Time: A Karnak-Ra adventure"  by Joeman199

Clarity:A good title that catches the readers attention.

Writing style:Fantasy fanfiction drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, good job.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?The structure is not good for the reader. It looks intimidating and is hard for those of us with week eyes.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialog seems appropriate to its speaker.

My favorite line:--- "A cat? Wearing clothes, what magic is this?!"---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A great idea for this story. I like the use of ancient Egypt as well as the reference to Mark Twain.



Joeman199, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Consider breaking down the long paragraphs to short ones with a blank line or two between them. Double-spacing and maybe larger font. This will make it less intimidating for a reader or browser. Consider formatting the dialog more appropriate.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review of Kayaking  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Have a sunshiny day!, I came across this story while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"Kayaking"  by Have a sunshiny day!

Clarity:A good title that describes the content good, also catches the readers attention.

Writing style: Biographical adventure drama.

Are all 3 genres listed? Yes, great job.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?The structure and format is fair for the reader.


My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A nicely written well detailed tale of learning to Kayak or first kayak adventure.

I am a canoer and have lived beside a river seems like forever. The title caught my attention. I found this article very well written and formatted with good detailed descriptions that brought back many memories for me.

I just can't imagine kayaking the first time at 70 years old, you've done good. There is nothing about it easy. It is very uncomfortable for a young person even. There is nothing like the rush of manoeuvring down a river in a canoe or kayak. That out weighs all the negatives'. It is good for the body and mind.

This well written strong story has taken me back to remembering the first times learning how.

Your great detailed descriptions make it easy for a reader to picture the scene.


Have a sunshiny day!, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it. Keep paddling.

Suggestions: Nicely formatted however a bit more line spacing would not hurt.

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)

Hi Tim Chiu, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "Youths Being Put in Their Place"  by Tim Chiu

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A very informative free verse poem about abusive human nature. No doubt it is too easy for those in power to abuse it.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:The image of someone trying to reveal a magician's secrets is what this reader see's.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I see with the mechanics of this poem.

Tim Chiu, thank you for sharing your poem. Write On!

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Review of Pretend  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)

Hi Dear Slim, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "Pretend"  by Dear Slim

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A unique free verse poem about relationships. Nicely worded with questions as to what's real.

Artistic Voice and Imagery:The portrait of a child learning to use emojis is what this reader see's.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:No problems that I see with the grammar, spelling or mechanic's.

Dear Slim, thank you for sharing your story. Write On!

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Review of The Rotating Fan  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Winchester, I came across this story while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"The Rotating Fan"  by Winchester Jones

Clarity: A good title that describes the contents o this story well.

Writing style: Mystery adventure drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Great job listing 3 genres.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?A great structure and format that does make it easier for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?The dialog is individual for each speaker.

My favorite line:---“Okay, that might be right. Who keeps count?”---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: Another great story, Winchester. I just finished reading Punta Mala so I was glad to see another one of your stories pop up.

I like this story also it is very well described with strong characters.

Well told holding this readers attention well from start to finish.

Winchester Jones, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:None.

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Joseph
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Review of Punta Mala  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi again Winchester Jones, I came across this story while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"Punta Mala"  by Winchester Jones


Clarity:Good title for this Pirate adventure.

Writing style:Adventure drama.

Are all 3 genres listed? your work will be available to more readers by using all three genres that you are allowed.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?The format and structure is fair for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?The dialog seems appropriate to its speaker.

My favorite line:---No morphine today. Today, Jack Granger needed his wits about him.----

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: I really like this story, of course getting killed by pirates sounds a heck of a lot more exciting. A great idea for this contest entry.

A good opening that grabs the readers attention. A great job with the descriptions, this keeps the readers attention through the story. That Jack Granger is quite a character. It sounds like you are familiar with the area and sailing.

To bad about Janet. I hate that Jack didn't get to use his Molotov cocktail.



Winchester Jones, thank you for sharing this work, I love it. A joy to read it.

Suggestions: I hope this won the contest.

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Joseph
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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)

Hi JCosmos, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "in the year 2025 the world ended "  by JCosmos

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: I like this poem. Very well written and I must say it sure gives you something to think about doesn't it. The pandemic showed us that just about anything can happen at anytime and society is not even close to being prepared for many of the worst disasters.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: This reader see's the portrait of a cyber attack making all electronics obsolete. Thus setting the modern society back Millennium's.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems at all that I see with the spelling mechanics or grammar.

JCosmos, thank you for sharing your story, it has begun this reader's mind to Spinning.
Write On!

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)

Hi Bella N, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "The Valley of Monarch"  by Bella N

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: I really like this sci fi type of poetry. A great idea, well done.
This work contains and maintains a nice constant flow with a realistic tone.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: The portrait of ancient Star Trek type astronauts exploring the cosmos, is painted for this reader.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I see no problem at all with the grammar mechanics or spelling.

WindSpirit 3, thank you for sharing your story.
Write On!

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)

Hi WindSpirit3, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "ballads of the mountain caps "  by WindSpirit3

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter: Beautifully written poem emphasizing nature and the environment. I like this work and can relate to it as I think most other people will too.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: I see beautiful mountain peaks with the animals that live there slowly changing from season to season.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: I can see nothing at all wrong with the grammar spelling or the mechanics.

WindSpirit3, thank you for sharing your work. Write On!

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Happy to write, I came across this story while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"Don't make Gremlins out of your Mogwai!"  by Happy to write

Clarity:A good title for this work.

Writing style:Fantasy folklore.

Are all 3 genres listed?Yes, that's good making your work available to more potential readers.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader? Nicely structured stanzas making it easy for the reader.


My favorite line:---A rage you can hardly deal with,gremlins that just run a-muck---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: I like this work written in a poetic type form. A good bit of world building that could be used over and over in different types work.
Hey great idea for this, I would keep it filed close and use it whenever needed in your writings.

Happy to write, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:A good relook and edit never hurts.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review of Day 32-33  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hi Fyn, I came across this story while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"Day 32-33"  by Fyn

Clarity:A interesting title.

Writing style:Diary style drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Good job.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?The structure could use a bit more line spacing to make it easier on those of us with weak eyes.

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My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:An entertaining tale described very realistically. The work carries this realistic flow from start to finish.

I like the diary style format of this, it seems more real this way.

Fyn,thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Consider more line spaceing and larger font.

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Joseph
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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Antony, I came across this story while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"How to Make Money with Carbon Offsets"  by Antony

Clarity: A good title that describes this article well.

Writing style:How to article, educational.

Are all 3 genres listed?No. If you use all 3 genres for this item it will be available to more readers that are looking for this type genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader? A good structure and format, however it would be easier for the reader with a bit more spacings between paragraph's.



My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A well written article packed with good information on this subject.

Antony, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Consider skipping a line between paragraphs and maybe two at new subjects that are in bold. This will make it more appealing to browsers.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi Patrickcmk, I came across this story while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"Chap2 : Real and Unreal Mental Illness A"  by Patrickcmk

Clarity:A good title for this chapter.

Writing style:Fantasy mystery drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Yes. By listing 3 genres your work will be available to more readers that are looking for this genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader?A nicely structured and formatted story. This makes it easier for the reader.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker? The dialog seems to be specific to its speaker.

My favorite line:---
"Cousin, don't be afraid, just treat it as if you are acting in a play and come here for a psychological examination."---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A well written, entertaining and easy to read story. This story gets the readers attention from the start then holds it good with bits of mystery throughout the story.

I like that one of the characters is referred to as cousin.
A good job with the ending leaving the reader wanting to turn the page.

Patrickcmk, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: A good proofread and edit to catch any mistakes you may have overlooked is always a good idea.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Ryyth, I came across this story while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"A box changed my fate "  by Ryyth

Clarity: The title seems to need work to better describe the content of this story.

Writing style: Teen fantasy drama.

Are all 3 genres listed?Good job listing 3 genres.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader? The structure and format in the second half after ChatGPT corrections is much better.

Is the dialog appropriate for the speaker?The dialog reads better also in the second-half.

My favorite line:---Ryuk was shocked. "Are you a girl or a cat?---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A good idea for this story. ChatGPT certainly did do a good job correcting spelling, grammar and format.

In these modern times ChatGPT is a great tool yet it is a bit scary how some people start to depend on it. A bit scary also how smart the darn thing has become. No doubt a helpful tool used in the correct way.

Today's modern marketing works hard two make people dependent on their products then after time the product becomes updated and more expensive to keep using. Unfortunately leaving many that were dependent on it at a loss.

It appears that you've done a good job of using the chat box to rewrite your rough draft. Personally this reader would worry that this practice might make one get lazy and become too dependent on it and forget the good habits that we were taught. On the flip side, seems like it could save a lot of time.

Ryyth, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Delete the rough draft at the beginning of the work.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

Joseph
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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)

Hi Weirdone-Back in the games, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "Planning a Party to Please the Lord"  by Weirdone-Back in the games

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A well worded entertaining poem with a nice rhyming pattern that contributes to the realistic flow and tone that this poem carries.

I like the very realistic startup of this work.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: The portrait for this reader: I see a young child writing invitations to his upcoming party.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: No problems at all with the spelling grammar or mechanics, that this reader can find.

Weirdone-Back in the games, thank you for sharing your poem.
Write On!

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Review of The Apple  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Jacky, I came across this story while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of:"The Apple"  by Jacky

Clarity:A nice title for this lovely tale.

Writing style:Flash fiction contest entry.

Are all 3 genres listed?By listing three genres to this work it will be available available to more readers and browsers that are looking for this type genre.

Is the structure and format easy for the reader? Very nicely structured with a good format that is easy for the reader.


My favorite lines:---Growing up was certainly not as much fun at eight as it was at four. Suddenly people were expecting things from him, actions that required thought and work.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A delightful entertaining story. I like the use of the apple and crabby Mr. Andrews. This helps with the realistic flow of this story.

Short but to the point which is exactly what today's modern reader likes.

Jacky, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:None

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Review of The bridge  
Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (4.5)

Hi Life's Dreams, I came across this poem while random reviewing.
I hope you will find this feedback helpful.

My impressions of the poem: "The bridge"  by Life's Dreams

Form, Format, Rhyme and Meter:A strong emotion filled poem with a random rhyming pattern that adds to the powerful flow of this work.

Well written and structured, I think most people as I will be able to relate to the strong poem.

Artistic Voice and Imagery: The image of a single member straying away from the direction that a large herd is leading toward. That is the portrait painted for this reader.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics: Well done. I see no problems at all with the spelling grammar or mechanics.

Life's Dreams, thank you for sharing your poem, a jot to read.
Write On!

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Jackiesmuse, I came across this story while random reviewing.


My impressions of:"The Countdown WC: 297"  by Jackiesmuse

Clarity:A great title that describes tis story well.

Writing style:Family children drama.

My favorite line:--- He was always joking about having enough boys for a baseball team.---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A nicely written as well as described short family story that most people should relate to because they've been through it too.

A typical scenario you can't make everybody happy at once there is always going to be somebody unhappy.

Jackiesmuse, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Have a great weekend.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Kenzie, I came across this story while random reviewing.
Kenzie, welcome to disAbility Writers Group. It's good to have you here. I feel you will enjoy it here as I have, a great atmosphere with friendly and helpful people.

My impressions of:"You Need Those Cookies WHEN?"  by Kenzie

Clarity:A great title for this story.

Writing style: Personal parental drama.


My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions: A great idea for this well written short story.
This strongly written story has brought back memories for me. Not in cooking but in science projects for the science fair Monday night and I'm told about it Sunday night. As with your cooking project I improvised and made due and succeeded though didn't win no prizes. It was definitely a learning experience and I feel that most parents have went through similar.

Kenzie, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Have a great weekend.

WRITE ON! KEEP WRITING! GOD BLESS.

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Review by Joseph
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hi Tamo, I came across this story while random reviewing.


My impressions of:"Uncertain Circumstances"  by Tamo

Clarity:Interesting title

Writing style:Folktale drama


My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:A interesting tale, with good descriptions that make it easy for the reader to picture the setting.

I'm not exactly sure how the title describes the story or what it's about.

Tamo, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions:Consider double spacing with a blank between paragraphs, this will make it easier and more appealing to readers. Consider shortening the long sentences and breaking down the long paragraphs into shorter ones. This makes it less intimidating for browsers or potential readers.
Quotation marks for spoken text is pretty standard.

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Joseph
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi again MoonChilde, I came across this story while random reviewing.

My impressions of:"Pop-Pop's Chocolate"  by MoonChilde

Clarity:A good title for this ritual story.

Writing style:Family rituals

My favorite line:--- However, anytime one of the kids would reach into the bowl my grandfather would say gruffly, “The dark chocolate is mine.”---

My two cents is only one opinion. Overall impressions:This is great. Short straight to the point, just the way today's readers like things.

This well written piece has my has gotten my memory to working trying to remember all those small rituals that so easily get lost in time. A great idea for this story.

MoonChilde, thank you for sharing this work it has been a joy to read it.

Suggestions: Have a great day. :)

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Joseph
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