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Review of It Hath Rained  
Review by elista83
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi Jordan!

This piece has good music, and I especially like the repetition of "song" and the long, flowing lines.

I do have a few suggestions for you to consider:

"Staccato, staccato, its plunging fingers play [staccato]" ~ Delete this last "staccato"? The third repeat feels a bit heavy.

"Beethoven, beware! for alas! it hath rained" ~ Why "alas"? That word has a negative connotation for me, and I thought the rain is good in this poem?

Consider deleting non-essential articles--they crowd the lines and interrupt the music a bit.

And finally, while the "sacred" language gives it a religious feel, it also makes the piece seem old fashioned/dated. Do you really need the "sacred" words to convey the sacred message?

All in all good piece, I'd say. I enjoyed it :)
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