Your story was very interesting, but there are a few notes I would like to add. You repeat the setting and certain phrases quite a bit in the passage and in larger texts, that is not a problem, but your story is short, so it is noticeable. Also, even though it is meant to be short, these stories are usually used to make progress on telling the story in full. I suggest expanding your details, or getting more into the characters' personalities and how they interact with the wild. A good way to study these affects is looking up famous short stories and making notes of how they make the characters interact with the world and try using that in your writing. Other than that, great story. It is very promising and I look forward to seeing what you do on here!
Your short story is listed under "March Review Raid" and I am currently participating in this month's Power Review raid.
The backstory with the compare and contrast was very well put up. I can very easily tell that the child looks back at their mother with envy, but also kind of misses her dearly.
The focus you put into this story to make it about nature is very good and fitting for the month ahead.
The whole story also lives up to its fictional category with its simplicity and being straight to the point while not giving too much away.
The story is descriptive and make the point get driven home when it is introduced.
This is a very well put together story. I enjoyed reading this. Thank you for sharing this to the world. Write more for the world!
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