I like your story so far. It has a very interesting start. I am intrigued and wondering what happens next. I do want to point out that you do have one repetative word, net. But, no worries thats just my observation. Keep it up, I look forward to seeing how this story plays out.
This is a good poem, made me think of one of my childhood movies. It was called the last unicorn. Its an old movie but its still fun. Anyways the unicorn in your poem made me think of the one from the movie. Keep up the good work =)
Wow, I really like this one. I can actually see the scene play out. Its also easy to relate to, I know I've been there myself. Those were usually my thoughts when my boyfriend had to go back out on the road. Good job though and keep it up, your poetry is beautiful.
I like this story, it really left me hanging as to what she was going to do next. I felt like I could really relate to your character, they were personable and believeable. Keep it up I look forward to reading more from you.
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