The writing style is different, but it's not entirely bad. If you really wanted to work on this one, you could dissect it and make it poem. That would take away some of the awkward sentence forms. A few grammar issues here. Good descriptions.
I am actually quite fond of this kind of poetry (merely observation), and I must say that you've done a wonderful job with this one. I really like where you've chosen to break your lines. Thank you for being creatively descriptive; the descriptions "verandah" and "eucalypt thrones" help the reader stand in the writer's shoes.
Nothing to criticize here. Gorgeous descriptions. Sunsets are endless topics... thanks for not being cliche!
Know the feeling. Have you ever been to Disney World? The fireworks are wonderful, and I can remember wishing there was someone I could wrap my arms around.
We simply cannot enjoy things as much when alone. That's why God created women for men. But I think someday the tradgedy ends.
Really like the last line "we dine in the dark". The idea of an unsigned valentine card is also striking. Some of the lines seem cliche, though, and I think you could come up with a better way to introduce your poem in the first two lines.
This is a very thorough analysis of the bill of rights. Though I do come from a Protestant Christian opinion, I do think that the separation of church and state is provided for in the Constitution. However, you should be careful to consider these rights in their authorial context. Especially when you assert that you do not believe that cruel and unusual punishment has been properly handled even yet, you ought to remember what kinds of torture the writers were intending: quartering, tar and feathering, hanging, and public humiliation. One last comment. Do not entirely discredit the role of religion in founding democracy, which Americans generally consider the idealistic form of government. Democracy is a Protestant idea, and follows Protestant theology. It is based on the depravity of man (that is why there is the checks and balance system) and the trinity (executive, legislative, and judiciary branches of government).
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