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Review of The Birthday Card  
Review by Nkem
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
This is LOL funny! I got a little ansy when the card began to talk, and the robots came out demanding he leave, but the ending was great!

The story has the perfect twist. Never saw that coming!

And you might want to edit the rating... can't be 'E'
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Review of I Miss  
Review by Nkem
Rated: E | (4.0)
I like this poem very much. I am not a poet.. although I enjoy writing and reading them. I am trying to learn more about the rules (if there are any) to poetry. This repetitive poem is a nice touch. I have one, which I now have the courage to post after reading yours... Maybe you can review it for me?


Your poem has a very down to earth feel to it, It is inviting and connects with the average person. It made me start to envision your grandma smiling in her garden. LOL

Thanks
nkem
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Review of Lost in the Hills  
Review by Nkem
Rated: E | (4.0)
Interesting story Steve. The title too seems very fitting. Lost...
I am not an editor, just an average reader.

I like how you start with the action rising. It kept me very interested and reading... very sweet story. It had a sad hint to it, but the ending was just right, I was relieved that he "knew" he would be ok.

Thanks for a great story!

On a diffrent note, I would suggest though that you avoid using contractions [they’d, i'd etc] unless it is dialogue.
:) good luck with the contest

Nkem
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Review of The Window  
Review by Nkem
Rated: E | (4.5)
Very good. Ii is actually interesting and pulls the reader in like a little story. I enjoyed reading and connecting each line. Thanks!
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Review of Untitled  
Review by Nkem
Rated: E | (4.5)
Ohh, I really like this :) A good little saying to advocate writing and self expression.

Good Job
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Review of Heaven's Tears  
Review by Nkem
Rated: E | (4.5)
I love it love it! Very simple very nice.
I am not a poet, and don't know all the rules of poetry, but from a readers perspective: it makes sense, flows easily and is simply beautiful.
Does it matter that it isn't very long? What are the rules on that?
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