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Review of Kittery Library  
Review by Mac
Rated: E | (3.0)
I dont get why a hen clucked. What do you mean? unless your reffering to the librarians being a hen, then ok. Its ok.
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Review of Tick Tock  
Review by Mac
Rated: E | (3.0)
Interesting poem. I kind of like this. Dont have a problem with it. Its just not the best.
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Review of My Prayer  
Review by Mac
Rated: E | (4.0)
I like the prayer and that you put it in the form of a poem with rhymes. Im not sure what I didnt like.
You have created
This whole world <

You will protect me
Because I am your girl <

Those two end words didnt rhyme like the rest of it.
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Review of Offerings  
Review by Mac
Rated: E | (3.0)
At the beginning it seemed like the person was lost, so I dont get the end. Why did it mention leaves, as if the whole thing was about them. It said
"So again the question
is dealt."
Like it was talking about them the whole time. elaborate on what you meant.
I liked the wording and just the poem, until the end.
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Review of All These Things  
Review by Mac
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I liked every comparison and every line. You chose great wording for this poem.
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Review by Mac
Rated: E | (4.5)
I liked the poem but didnt like the repetition of
"and the kinfolk sing along...
and the kinfolk sing along."

I guess it was suppose to be like a song itself and I get that. I just dont think it was properly placed in the poem. Something just wasnt working there. Overall I like the description of the types of songs they sang. Could've described how they looked and felt when they sung though.
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Review by Mac
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
Its a good length poem. Art is my life and its what im good at so its understandable how you feel when you know what you want but its like the line "i've done what I was told I wanted" was interesting. It seemed you were maybe being unnecassarily pushed towards what you already knew you wanted.
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Review of On Film  
Review by Mac
Rated: E | (4.5)
I understand the part about seeing another's dream. I like it but don't understand all of, i mean like i understand but give me more feeling aobut seeing anothers dream, etc.
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Review of Circus Circuits  
Review by Mac
Rated: E | (4.5)
I really like this. I like the rhymes in the poem. It also caught my attention just by what you were saying. One of my favorite poems i've read.
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Review of Older Poetry  
Review by Mac
Rated: 13+ | (2.5)
Art is my thing to. I'm more of a drawer than a painter, but it is short and no imagery but because I know what you mean I can imagine it.
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Review by Mac
Rated: E | (2.5)
I don't like the way it ended. It waas a little short for me and all of it didn't make since. I'd say make it more understandable for your readers because you know how you feel but the difficult part is getting other people to understand or better yet feel how you feel.
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Review by Mac
Rated: 13+ | (1.5)
It's short but it's also funny. It shows to me that the mirror does not like the queen but he knows what is good for him so he just thinks what he feels instead of expressing them.
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Review by Mac
Rated: ASR | (3.0)
It's pretty good but a there is very depressing or sad tone to it which brings out more a darkness like feeling. It shows how much heart ache that this person feels.
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