What an interesting piece, I have not encountered much poetry on the topic of feminism but am pleased to have stumbled across yours. I certainly admire the ethic behind your poem and the expression of it with such varied vocabulary. I like the metaphors you use of shells and auction rooms; these are very expressive and I wonder whether they could be expanded on further or followed up throughout the poem? There is a good rhyme scheme used throughout and on the whole a good flow. If you are looking to work on this poem, I would think of looking at the lines "what the outside reflects, what the outside sells" - I like the point made and would keep the second line, but I think the repetition may be unnecessary here. I definitely admire your ability to keep this short and sweet when it would be so easy to vent on the topic of injustice and attitudes to women! I think these verses do a very good job of expressing your thoughts and give the reader much to think about when it comes to value, image and the way we treat others.
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