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Review by Anne Lorenz
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Really liked this. An emotional response is well cultivated, and the characters are well defined despite the short length of the piece. However, at the beginning when Suzanne and Sebastian are together I got a little confused about who was actually speaking. Perhaps you could seperate Suzanne's words and Sebastian's thoughts and actions into different paragraphs to make it clearer. Good stuff though, enjoyed it muchly. Hope that helps!
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