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Review by M. R. Kenney
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
JJ after reading the first chapter from this second book I went out and bought your first one. Loved it. Wrote a review on Amazon saying your book reminded me of Zane Grey meeting the 23rd century.

I don't know that there is anything to critique. You certainly have the same voice going here and now that I know your characters better I understand how well your first chapter followed your first book. My only question with this chapter is whether Jesse still owes Kayla her part of the Nexus bounty? Does that provide enough of a reason for Jesse to save face in front of his crew and go see the person who drives him nuts while at the same time constantly piques his interest?

I like what you have so far with this book and I'm finding it fascinating getting to watch this book unfold as you create it.

I'm curious if you have fully outlined this story or do you just figure it out as it unfolds on it's own?

Thanks for sharing,
Mike
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Review of Ellekonge  
Review by M. R. Kenney
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Hawkmoth,

I thoroughly enjoyed your story and only wish it were longer. I thought you did an excellent job creating the scene and introducing Hild's motives and longings. I really didn't see anything that should be improved upon and only caught one small misspelling.

"which were becoming unbearable- she's" I believe you meant "she'd"

Thank you for sharing your story.

Warm regards,
Mike Kenney
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