Plot: A whimsical tale about ones encounter with a Dragon.
Style and Voice: The voice was
Scene/Setting:The dialogue takes place on a beach. Adds to the whimsy of the story.
Characters: Luther the Dragon, and an unidentified individual that engages in dialogue with the Dragon. Although Luther's voice provides some characterization, it would help to have him described. It could add more humour to the story.
Dialogue: The dialogue is light, humorous. The structure needs work. In its present form its a difficult read.
Grammar and Mechanics: The grammar and mechanics need work. You probably already know this. You want to help the reader by making it readable, which increases the enjoyment.
Suggestions: Clean-up the grammar and structure. Identify the narrator. Describe the appearance of your characters.
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