Thanks for your cute little limerick. Nicely written and obviously very timely. I am glad you explained the word 'gyrus', as it was one I didn't know. I love learning new words.
Hope you are staying safe and well. Best Wishes, Cynaemon
Welcome to writing.com. I hope you will enjoy your journey here. I really like your little poem. It is well-written, and has a nice rhythm and flow. I found no grammatical or typographical errors. There are some place where I might chance the punctuation, but they are not critical.
For example:
break my bones - (I wouldn't put a hyphen at the end of this line)
Punctuation is something we as writers always have to deal with. Like I said though, not critical.
Welcome to writing.com. I hope you will enjoy your journey here. This is an interesting little poem. I think you are trying too hard to be 'poetic', and you have left the reader feeling confused.
that is easy, simple, effortless. - I think it should be 'that IT is easy...'
Welcome to writing.com. I like your name. It is different.
I am not sure if this is meant to be a very short story, or just the beginning of one. At least you have done a good job with what you have written. I hope you will add to this as time goes on. It is a good start.
I enjoyed reading your little poem. Okay, I can see how you are calling it 10 lines, but that is kind of stretching it. That is cool though. It has an interesting sentiment. I am glad it ended so positively.
I really enjoyed your little piece. It has a positive and interesting sentiment. And that is a good thing. Sadly, there are so many grammatical errors, it makes it very hard to read, or to even concentrate on the actual message of the piece. I think you can do a better job than this. Good luck with all of your writing.
Cynaemon
PS - If you clean this up, I will be happy to come back and re-rate it. It does have possibilities.
I enjoyed reading your thoughts on writing. I especially agree that writing comes from the heart. There are a number of grammatical errors in this short piece. I think it could use a little work.
For example:
One of the unknowns that those of who love to write quickly understand that what we write may be meaningful today to someone or years down the road.
This sentence is long and unwieldy. It should read 'quickly understand IS that what we write' I would put a period after 'someone' then begin a new sentence.
Congratulations on being featured in the Feb 2019 Poetry Newsletter.
I loved your little poem about words. I so agree with you. I love learning new words. Honestly, I READ the dictionary. I have always been fascinated by words, and have never met a blank piece of paper. For the last few years I have had a 'word of the year.' Such fun. This year I have two: seraphine and impavid.
I guess this is one reason we still write - because there are so many cool words out there, and so little time. Keep up the good work.
I liked reading your little poem about the Knight. I felt it was a big of a rant, but that is a good thing. Often writing about our feelings is a good way to explore them.
Your poem feels negative to me, but it is well-written, and has a nice rhythm and flow. I found not errors of any kind. I hope you are still writing. Keep up the good work.
I enjoyed reading your interesting poem. You have conveyed the sad feeling of breaking up very well. Your poem has a nice rhythm and flow. I found no errors of any kind. Keep up the good work. I especially liked the short middle verse, and the way you have written it with no punctuation. This is very effective, and shows the reader the flow of the writer's thoughts.
Thanks for being here, and thanks for giving us all of these fun contests. That is a lot of years of contests, and some great ideas. I am going to use the ideas as prompts for drabbles this year. I love all the inspiration one can find here at writing.com.
I couldn't resist reading your cute clerihew about @realDonaldTrump. It definitely made me laugh. And great job with the clerihew form. I am glad that you gave the excellent explanation of the form. I am going to try my hand at writing a few of these.
I enjoyed reading your poems. The first one took a little bit of thought. I had to read it through a couple of times. The second one is very nice. I liked the sentiment in it a lot. Sometimes the only love we can find is in our writing. The third poem has an interesting thought.
I too go through phases of writing nothing but poetry. It is an enjoyable occupation. Keep up the good work.
Interesting list of verbs. I enjoyed this little piece of your story. I hope your NaNo year went well.
Just a couple of minor errors, which I am sure you have corrected in your final piece.
This came up in the Read and Review section. I enjoyed reading your poem, and liked the sentiment behind it. Your poem is well-written and has a good rhythm and flow.
What loves is - I think this should be LOVE is - just a little typo.
I really enjoyed reading your brainstorming session for NaNo. I hope you had a successful NaNo the year you wrote this.
I have done NaNo six years in a row, and I don't necessarily focus only on my main character. In fact, I have re-written the story numerous times from the point of view of the different characters. I also went to spend some time just writing a short synopsis of all of my 'other' characters. Anyway, good luck with all of your writing, especially NaNo.
Congratulations on being featured in the Romance Newsletter.
This is an interesting little 'haiku.' I guess you could say it is about nature, well, human nature. It does follow the traditional 5-7-5 format of a haiku. I think one does not usually capitalize words in a haiku. I found no grammatical or spelling errors.
Welcome to writing.com. I hope you will enjoy your stay here.
I liked your little poem. It has a really nice sentiment. It is a good free-form poem and flows along nicely. I found no obvious grammatical or spelling errors.
I really enjoyed your poem about Earth Day. It has a lovely sentiment, and I agree that every day is truly earth day. You have done a wonderful job of describing the beauties of this earth. Your poem has a good rhythm and flow, and I found no grammatical or spelling errors.
I really enjoyed reading your poem about your grandfather and his 'cowboy coffee.' It reminded me of my own grandfather and the things which remind me of him. Your poem has wonderful visuals, and I can just see the old steel percolator on the stove. Thanks so much for sharing your memory.
Best Wishes, Cynaemon
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