very well explained in simple words, what ever is felt at heart can be well written or well spoken . poverty can be felt if you see it closely and be at that point for a while to get to the roots of the feeling , physically and emotionally - its true that being too comfortable means taking away from someone - its common sense - God has equipped the world for everyones comfortable needs - if one is poor in any way of live ,means someone else is over comfortable - when i am giving away stuff because i have surplus means, it wasn't for me in the first place -yes even smallest form of poverty is the worst kind of violence -
its always heart breaking when one is leaving physically - initially it looks that we will feel the same way when livi g at a distance - as humans we do need to be close to the one we care for and love - we need to be touched and felt and heard - staying away works for while, and then physical distance starts shadowing the emotion too . missing becomes too strong and then you get settled with someone or something else - memories do stay first in the upper files and then in the files at the end of the pile - well written and deeply felt by me too-
we fight or we don't, we like it or we frown , siblings bonding is alway there and surely good feelings too. Grandparents are an asset at times weather you haven't seen still you miss them, talk with them. cherish whatever is told to you by your parents.
surely everyone wants to be successful and powerful. strong believe in Allah and self confidence is the key to success.
The consistency in whatever you believe in and what ever your actions are, is the key too.for all this to come our way we do need some training at home when we are young. all else will come our way inshaALLAH
its so simple yet well explained and one can picture the pickup and the beautiful drive and can enjoy the song as being there with you two.
i can visualize the the look on your face when you got picked for a drive and the smile on your mothers face i can see and feel that too.
the back home drive
i can imagine that too and feel it too, how you both felt.
thou its not clear who picked who, i mean the relationship?
in the modern world we call it sufic way of saying things but yes eyes do say what words cant say and eyes reach that very corner of the heart and soul where the kindest of all the words and the most gentle touch can not reach. only eyes can make you feel wanted or rejected with even a simple expression or a word. an expressionless face gets all the expression only with a blink of an eye. that blink is understood more then an explanation of hundred pages . it truly touched my heart.
hi Sandi, whatever misty has said ,i can hear it from her heart. when you love some one and take care of them may that be an animal you can hear them. i have recently developed fondness for plants and have some vegetables and fruits in my small garden. I talk to them and see them smile . like misty they express.
misty loves you, i am praying for you misty to get well soon
i am noreen
you so rightly said, some kids are or even elder are just laking confidence that makes then fall and fall. mostly our mates are not sensitive enough to understand whats wrong with the other mate. Its no ones fault at times ,rather most of the times because as kids and as humans we all have enough on our plate all the time. Still some gentle one around can always make a difference, like Fiona, she is playing her part.One day jared will understand as he grows up and Rachel will get out of it too, mostly we all do. this story is making me think about people around me. thanx foe writing and sharing
really nice and easily put for the youth to realize thats its good to be your way always but good to leave a window open for the events to to come back and be a part of our life and events again. childhood friends are sincere friends always with certain hangups here and there once in a while. we don"t comprehend initially that life is not our way always and thats good too, because things being our way always is not a learning path.
saying stuff is very much human but apologizing is really something.If the realizing is coming from the heart it must be appreciated as it will strengthen the friendship deeply.
honest words that are flowing naturally from a loved ones heart and mind. i can feel that a sibling was in pain for long, that was felt deep by a loved one. he is sad and relieved at the same time saying the deceased is not fighting the agony and pain anymore.
we always say that for the sake of saying it and trying to comfort ourselves but it hardly helps, as the loss is bigger then our thoughts. seeing someone alive in whatever condition is more comforting then anything in this whole wide world. we humans are made that way. our comfort only comes [most of it,or mostly] when love is tangible. we see and believe that some one is really around and not a ghost .
very touching poem.
very real
very nicely expressed and explained in what we call"small talk". at times ,rather all the times to feel confident that some ones shoulder vis there foe you is enough. that makes you angry and sad that no one s asking ,whats wrong? on the other hand our loved ones are trying to give us space. its widely said ,either of you is wrong. I say both can be right at the same time. as both are seeing from different angle and perspective.
very interesting thou, at times we have things in mind that don't let us get settled anywhere, may be the broken relationships, may be the fear to move on, may be the fear to be alone again. so much more, and its personal affair, otherwise all around must hear it.
we hear so many stories of supernatural stuff all the time, weather we believe it or not , in our back of the mind we think about it, and it also disturbs us. it also happens that our subconscious mind doesn't approve of certain thing or situation, and we cant manage it physically.
i am also thinking , what was the sound ;)
what a story
rather a live story
i could see it happening in front of my eyes ,that a fatherly figure in my neighborhood is ringing a bell after we are done with our assignments and supper to get around him for a bedtime story that leaves us with a message and a thought provoking discussion to help us see more ,when dreaming.
coverage on tv is a political issue , never mind , some people are not in the news but are always in the hearts of FAMILIES.
SALUTE to all these legends, real legends.
this is the beauty of being a thinker and a positive one . it changes you into a writer , may be a best seller even on a sip you take from a soup bowl or a step you plan to take for a long walk. it may happen that you pull back the forwarded foot and come back to your blank book.
thinkers are creators ,
thinkers are inventors ,
thinkers are discoverers ,
thinkers are only alive species in my opinion.
only a thinker can make things happen.
positive thinker.
amazing,
this is so true
had i known
i mean deep inside myself
obviously on the face of it, i do understand that time will pass
my breadth will surrender my life in front of my eyes to ALLAH
no one will listen to me that i am leaving
on the contrary they will understand my leaving
BUT after leaving me to the dust
all will forget
whats happened to me will happen to them too within no time
and that is how life works
I AM WRITING
SOON I WILL SAY
I WAS WRITING
its true dear, love is a deadly trait. you keep it to yourself and let them know, hurt is always yours. at times , rather most of the time love leaves your life as mysteriously as it entered and made you smile. one is left with memories and memories only. you cherish them and and you are hurt remembering too.
nothing is permanent in life, they say so, so is love.
AND we as humans fail to understand and wont ever understand.
that's life!
that's love!
Ben dear it is so true, 'some say you have written too little and skipped all, on the other hand some say, you say you have said too much, couldn't you manage camouflaging.'
this is being a human. words are easy said even without experiencing and practising. “The proof of the pudding’ is in the eating” its very well said and its said that way only all over the world in different languages.
now a days life is tough and becomes dangerous every once in a while. “It’s better to have it and not need it, than to need it and not have it.” after reading this phrase of yours i am still thinking about, should i or shouldn't i keep a weapon for protection, still thinking, and thank you anyway to make me and many other think.
one last thing, (we have a running battle on words and their meanings and I'm at least somewhat ahead) and flopped. this phrase of running battle is also fascinating.
much thanx for the INVENTION.
yes its true, we are all captives of time. its only time that's cashing us, and killing us at the same instant. the sad part is that we don't comprehend well in time, and start running after something else in our depress mode and thoughts. if love is true and belonging is intense and faithful. time can not take ways what belongs to the one.
so sweet and innocent ,honest and modest. such easy and smart expression, and rhymed well. the expression can be felt and understood by young and old at the same level. while reading it i could feel the sun on my shoulders. i could hear the waves reaching and leaving the shore.
after the tan i could enjoy the moon and stars watching over me and myself staring at them. what a romance at daytime, as well as at the nigh time. well played.
well written, as felt.
love is never a puzzle.
love is a simple word but ,BUT, it has many faces , phases, horizons and depths that cant be understood by a mind and heart. that's the way we are made.
man is not so perfect to understand himself and the other fully and 'as' always.
At times we love some ones way of talking or walking or dressing up and we come up with, he is the best person i want and need as my life partner. it becomes a disaster when he is there twenty four seven.
so love is fondness at times that is time bound.
seeing someone daily
meeting someone two times a day. that's it.
it doesn't mean you don't want to be with someone else for the time even when you are thinking about the first person.
it just says you don't understand your feelings and the others feelings too.
its fine. but no use confessing if you cant afford or mange maintaining what you say.
so better save then being sorry. be very care full when committing.
its good for every ones future and prevents all hurts.
To be honest dear this is what life is all about. you love, you trust, you care ,you share, and in the end you get what you did not deserve and you never thought of. life is strange and cruel at time, that's the way love works, not all the time but most most of the times,nowadays. its sad and bad. life of tears at night, just you,your sorrows and your sad self, life is all pretence and false smiles when you wake up in the morning ,as you have to put up a face,with family, friends and work.
well expressed.
very expressive jamie
you have made me and surely other readers too, very sad.i am just confused to be on whose side. both of you seem to be equally sad and hurt at the same time.
it must have taken you to stop writing many times in grief thou the writing is not very long,but very very emotional at the same time.
many words are difficult for a thirteen year old as this writing is for thirteen plus.
great expression. well done
and prayers for you from noreen
its a very well written story. emotional and live to the extend that i was really involved and i started visualising what was going on.i had a class in half hour but i couldn't leave the story and go. eventually i got done and left. for a while i was in the spell of the story and then i made an effort to come out of it. well done.
very softly and nicely created a scene, it is making me travel in time.
you are correct, we cant be distant,if we are conscious enough.
miles do not matter.
well they do at times.
we are all one at the higher frequency.
we see the same twinkling twinkling little stars, we feel the same cool breeze and same piercing hot air , the same boiling sun an the same cool cool moon.
GOD is great,HE love all humans and keeps them united with nature.
its such a nice and visual scene for me to see the rain pearls washing away my our bad times, gestures, postures and thoughts. i wish it comes true in my life to sweep my sorrows away. positive thinking thou!
its good and positive to be wishing and thinking about the gone time. but really good not to be repenting and making use of the NOW.
its great to look into the mystery of time, that's gone and that's ahead of us.that makes you going and stay tuned and be positive.
i am happy that your poem reinforce my thinking that is
stay in the moment, enjoy it and smile
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