You really made a great piece here about how a teenager feels!
And I think a lot of people can relate to that even if there not a teenager right now
The only thing I want to point out is that in the first line the "I" needs to be uppercase
Other then that you did really good!
You used great words to show how a teenager feels in the world.
If I am understanding right ( probably not xD) your saying that life's gift is that your able to Love , have peace, have wisdom, be persistence , have clarity and patience. (It would be helpful if you told me if i was right or wrong or this will bother me all day .-.) If so I think this is a very gorgeous piece of poetry you wrote. Its short but you say exactly what needs to be said! ^.^
Continue writing gorgeous poetry that flow from your mind and onto blank pieces of paper!
~OnlyInDreams
Enjoy your day!
P.S Just because this poetry is based on life I'd appreciate a lot if you checked out a piece I wrote on life as well! Its totally the opposite of
your piece here so I'd like your opinion if you don't mind! :D
I love the feelings in your story.
You had a nice rhyme scheme going on.
I like how you put "Wish I could start again" because I think your not the only who wishes start again
Many people like to start again because they've messed up in life by doing wrong things.
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