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Review by ClarityofClouds
Rated: E | (4.5)
I found this poem to be timely and very interesting, as I have had similar questions about the direction in which society seems to be going. I found the images powerful, and my favorite line is "pale glazed faces in waiting rooms gaze/at screens where cockroaches take to the stage".

The first lines of the poem are also especially arresting, about our children "marred by coin slots on the bridge of their nose". I found it very sad, but yet interwoven well with satire. I also liked the question at the end, as it challenges the reader to think more about the human condition.

The only "improvement" type of comment that I could share (from one reader's perspective) is that in the fourth stanza I wondered if "public service announcement" might be shortened or replaced by another word that flowed a little more with the previous three lines? The first three flowed together so nicely that in the fourth line I found I was hoping for a word that not necessarily needed to rhyme with but which was similar to "Klein".

Overall, I found the poem to be an excellent wake-up call for where our society is headed if we continue along the same path.
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Review by ClarityofClouds
Rated: E | (4.0)
Thank you for this article on positive vs. negative thinking. It's a good reminder to me to work on creating positive thoughts; as negative thinking patterns can become so ingrained in our minds that it does indeed dominate our lives. It's true that negative thinking produces emotions like anxiety and depression, or "anxession" as I call it. I look forward to reading more articles on this subject, especially about overcoming the negative thought patterns.
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