Hi Such a pretty poem.. so true so so true... and how beautifully you put this together .. short simple and again so true ... Oh thank you thank you for sharing this .... RainStar
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Hi ....I enjoyed this poem and the ending is the best part of it. I go back to hat day And remember your sun-shining day.... Thanks for sharing .. RainStar
This poem is not my type and the reason is as follows:
poetry should come from heart and at moments when the soul is crying to escape..... Poetry and contest do not make a good couple unless an already written poem get submitted for a contest related to the poem's subject.
Anyway. It is my opinion and it does not mean it is correct! And by the way, to be able to write such a good poem and follow a contest rule, you must be a very able poet. And I can see this in your poem here.
This poem of yours has something that I have mentioned in so many of my poems.... I am 38 now and when I look back at my young days, something always comes to my mind... Image of a wild girl with a hair scattered around her shoulders... Chasing cats and butterflies...
The answer to your question is yes. We all hide behind masks, and do not have only one mask... We have so many different masks for different occasions and different individuals.... Masks are like clothes we wear... We put on clothes to hide our bodies, as well as how our bodies... Our clothes sort of represent our personalities... And so are our masks....
I loke this poem. It is a poem without a mask.
Sparkles
RainStar
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I was amazed by the fact that the writer of this story is only 13. I came to this site while reading a testimonial by the author. The age 13 was mentioned. I have a daughter myself, so by seeing this item on the port, I decided to read on.
It is a fantastic story, both the plot, and the characters are well brewed and lovely.
Well done and I would like to come back and read more when you have other items here. You are a natural writer.
Sparkles
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And here is my rating for the folder. Although it has only one song present, but I am sure it will be filled with so many beautiful songs as the one currently in it: "Invalid Item" .
Write on and thanks for sharing.
Sparkles
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I like this ghazal. I generally enjoye the kind of poetry that has rhythm and also rhymes and ghazal include both. Ghazal satisfies my thirst for poetry.
Well done and thanks for sharing yoru "SHER"s.
Sparkles
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I like the way you describe images. They are like watching a film.. The pictures come alive in front of the reader's eyes.
I suggest that you use your talent in describing, to try adding some otehr senses such as smell, and taste to your writing. This way you would be nearer to reality...
Sparkles
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Happiness is where we feel good, perhaps in all of writing.com moments.... Why two hours per day on this site, reading and reviewing? Because it makes you happy: it is something to look forward to when you start your day.
Keep writing, and reviewing... Look forward to having you on my port....
Sparkles
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This is the second matlib I have ever read. It was absolutely fantastic and surprising.
I specially enjoyed:
"To prove themselves, the contestants will have to compete in an endless string of pointless challenges, including, but not limited to, eating DONKEY EARS. But that’s just the beginning. In addition to having to survive each other, they’ll have to survive the company of Paris Hilton and POSH SPICE!”"
This is a very beautiful and classical fantasy. I like the way Unusa searches for the truth.
Just a few opinions:
Overuse of the word “mist”., used it five time sin the first five paragraphs.
I like the following description: “ “Usuna, my Lord, it is so good to see you,” the man said as he finally reached Usuna. He reached out with his hand and held it there to welcome a handshake, but Usuna ignored this and gave the friend a bear hug.”
In the sentence: “We are at rest, now, and that is not what our Greaters would want of us. Let us smile and shake hands.”, what do you mean by “Greaters?”
In the ending, I would use “gods” instead of “Gods”, but it is up to the author to make the final decision.
I have not found any spelling or grammatical issues. The use of vocabulary is great.
Well done and write on. You are a very good writer of fantasy.
Sparkles
RainStar
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You have someone who enjoys your port a lot.... And that is me again, RainStar, or as you called me, Rain!
I like this poll, as I had the question in my head as well. I used to blog and stopped it as I found people who bloged, were not serious about writing.
When I used writing.com for my trial period, I was amazed to see so many high calibre authors at this site, and I knew by instinct that so may of them were actually published authors and editors.
The reviewing system is great, but I found that with the number of people publishing on the site, there are not enough reviewers.
I personally think that whoever uses the site, has to do three proper reviews for each logon.
This way, we all get to read and review each other's work.
You sent me gift points for reviewing some items, and I though I return the favour and step into your port to see what you are up to.
I found this FREE article!!! .
On serious side, I personally think that writing.com is doing an absolutely great job. I love everything about this site; the fact that you continuously improve your services and created so many different items to attract more people into the community is easily perceived and I can't imagine you even get such accusations.
I have started my membership as a free trial. The range of free facilities for a free membership was above what one could expect for "FREE" anyway.
By the way, I have been thinking that you still can do a lot to make the site even better.
One of my suggestions is to provide a portfolio rating system as well; a place that users can give their overall opinion about each others port. This makes all the authors to pay an extra attention to individual styles and methods of grouping items in the port.
I have so many other suggestions too. But if you get a chance let me know what do you think about the one above.
I just visited your port and surfed your web site too. Just a typo in web site: "I have been writing a lot of non-medical stuff including sort stories ....
A good memory and a lesson to teach and learn.
First of all do not judge people by their dress: This applies to writing.com authors, do not judge them by the colour of their case.
Second: Do not assuem things are the way they are just by seeing the signals.... I mean the cup made the author to think that the lady was a beggar and the pale pair of jeans added to the reasons..., but it was not the case at all.
We make so many of these mistakes in our lives every time we judge someone by just looking at the surface...
Good story.
RainStar
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Here is another deep poem, short and full of meanings. I feel that you are very profound and penetrating in awareness, understanding and portraying the concept of death.
It has one of those things that scares me more than anything, specailly when it happens to younger people ....
Well done.
RainStar
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I like the way you use text formatting to convey meanings; It gives life to your work. I know it is not easy to do this using ML. It need a patient person with great sense of art.
Anyway I am so sorry for the victim in this poem, but it is not clear whether Elizabeth goes to heaven or her mum, or both?
Rainstar
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