This made me laugh at some of these, I remember them when I was little though a lit different. I wanted to say this is written very well and I really enjoyed reading this piece. This is something that would be be cool to show to others, I think my grandmother would love this as well. This is very unique way of writing out some poems.
Wow this is chapter was amazing, I was interested from the begining and I have to say I liked your character. She seems like a down to earth type of girl, yet she stood her ground and wanted to know what was going on and why the man had approached her. There was description and that was great, helped see a little of the scene that you were writing about. I loved reading this story.
I am actually into everything vampire and have finally started one of my own, so I wanted say I liked this as the feeling coming though great, I would suggested not so many me's in one sentence. Other then that I loved the part where he said the only thing he loved or needed, is blood.
So happy I came across this place, my name is Sapphire and I am an up and coming author. I am trying to get my work out there soon. I write erotic writing and would love to get to meet you.
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