I admit that I know next to nothing about poetry, so I might not be the best person to review any, but since I read this, I thought it only fair that I let you know. I believe this is very well written. I really liked it and the words used were very descriptive.
I read your first chapter. I just wanted to say that I really think this idea is intriguing, but I wanted to know before I went on, is if this is a completed story or if it is not completed, are you planning on completing it? I would like to read more, but cliff hangers make me cry.
Very interesting. I really liked the references to "The Children of the Corn" and the details this had. I felt like I could really picture the old house! I wonder what happened to the ghost girl and if she really is a witch. I had no idea what type of story this would be other than the witch thing and was pleased with how this chapter started. You have great writing style and this was well written.
That was a LONG short story. I mean that in a good way. It felt long to me at least. Maybe because so much happened. I wonder... is he just a little crazy? It was funny how at the end he heard a sound again.
I think you have amazing writing skills. I was glued to the screen as I read this. It made me think of how happy and excited I was to move into my first apartment. While I did not completely destroy the place, things did not go as I thought they would. They never do.
This is really neat. I really like the beginning intro. The pictures help you to know what the ship looks like. Reminded me of a picture book from when I was younger, of course with less pictures. But I ramble.
I don't think I know about the fandom this is supposed to be in (It's tagged as fan fiction) but everyone who has been apart of writing it seem to be good writers. The grammar is good, and spelling seems to be okay. It seems like a fun thing to do, writing a story like this. Reminds me of role playing in a way.
Wow, I do not know what to think. I did not expect that. Not at all. You got me. It was a surprise. Haha. My eyes were wide open. Why did she kill him? Is she having an affair with his best friend? Did they plan this? What could have drove her to do this when it seemed Matt loved her so much?
Anyways, good writing and props for surprising me. Also it was a little creepy, but in a good tingly way.
What is wrong with slash? I am just wondering? It is just two people in love, no matter their gender.
This could be a good idea. I have not seen this show more then a few random episodes here and there, though I do like the idea behind Totally Spies. I think I also saw some books kind of like this show too. It would be fun to be a spy. Good luck with what ever you do.
This was well written. I liked reading it. I really enjoyed the ending. I actually laughed out loud. I could imagine this happening. I don't carry a purse myself (I'm a female) so I don't have to make my husband carry anything feminine. It would be funny to see his reaction. I do not think he would care. I'm a doll collector and he has had to hold one of my dolls in public.
I am at a loss for words. I read the whole thing with my eyes wide open and my mouth was probably hanging open too. I was also leaning as close to the screen as I could. I was enthralled by the imagery and wondering just what happened, though while reading, I figured out what probably happening before seeing it confirmed at the end. He caught his wife cheating on him and then he killed her? Something along those lines.
I think you should continue to write. You are good at it. Good luck. My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .
Very interesting. I can tell it is part of something bigger, because there is a lot I do not understand. Like them being from the future. What could the be up to, I wonder? Why did they come to this time? Too bad for the boy. It seemed he might have had a thing for her. I liked the way you described things and it is written very well. Easy to read. Hope you continue to write. Good luck. My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .
At first, I was thinking, this would just be about Kai being cruel and selfish about ruining Liddy's Christmas, so he could get what he wanted, but then it turned into something more. I still think her brother was being really selfish. Christmas isn't about the gifts. It's about the people. I realize he is still young and would learn the truth some day.
I liked the fantasy aspect of this story. About the dragons and the girl being the ambassador. It was well written and I enjoyed reading it. I'm glad I read it until the end, because I was pleasantly surprised. Keep writing and good luck.
It is very well written. I liked the way you describe what is going on. I think you have a promising future ahead of you, whether you continue to write or do something else. You have talent. I hope you put it to good use. I also hope you continue to write. Good luck.
My only suggestion for this is to maybe split some of the paragraphs, making them shorter. When a new line of word is spoken, maybe start a new paragraph. It would make things easier to read and understand, and flow better.
Okay, this is rather interesting, but I could not really understand what happened. It was well written and the description was good, but I was confused. Is this just a short story as it says or perhaps will be part of something longer? It felt unfinished. I don't think that is a bad thing, just leaves readers wanting to know more. I hope you continue to write. Good luck. My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .
This is really promising. I haven't read anything like this that I can remember at least. I feel for Sasha. I wonder what made her father start doing something like that and how long he has been living a life of crime. It's interesting. I can understand they way she is reacting to her foster parents, but I hope for her sake, she starts to open up a little. I think you should continue to write, and write about everything. Good luck. My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .
This is well written. The grammar looks to be okay. There might be a few places here and there to improve, which is true for everyone, but nothing major stood out. I think you should continue to write, and write about everything. You have a promising start. Good luck. My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .
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