A very nice work Valen.....i'm not a qualified poet yet but i aim to be one someday......i love to read a lot and have read a lot of short poems and haikus.........this poem of yours.reminds me of life...if i'm interpreting it ri8.........i would like to know more about it.plz send me a note if you can.i'll be thankful.
Angela.
A very nice poem..um ........red lips......well this fight that you mention occurs in every single mind in the world...nice to read it in words.....choice of terms is nice....and expressions are great......the contradiction clearly shows........ beautiful work.
Angela.
hi elemenopy.....a very sweet and intriguing work..really fascinating...a real love story if i may say.yet i do not understand the role of the father of the man....was he dead too...and the two boxes.....they were the coffins ri8? one of the man who loved emily and who did the other box belong to? plz answer if u can......
hi matthew....nice work....the style of writing and the choice of words is great......it was captivating to a certain point.....enjoyed the one act incidents...hope to read more and better......yet a certain factor of attraction is needed.........waiting for the next part...
Angela.
hey tom...it seems as if i will have to become your regular reader......u write to good .......i loved your work in this one too......what imagination....i really like sci-fi novels....and the fatal consequences and dangers.....posed by the technology on human kind due to human kind........this topic has got great scopes.........and your work is one of the best utilisation........
hi max,
this story was really ironic...i could never have imagined this kind of an end..... the diction is great.....a kind of story that forces the mind to anticipate the end.....and not leave the desktop until each and every word has forced its way in the mind for good...lovely.
Hi Tom,
I went through your story and your writing style is really nice, including your description of the events. It's really a mind binding story. But i really hate to tell you that i was disappointed at the climax.......do you have a sequel for this story...if not then plz do me a favour and tell me where that noise came from..........i'm dying to know.
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