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Review of A Valentine Rose  
Review by SirWilliamII
Rated: E | (5.0)
This one truly deserved a first place ribbon. As a man in love with his wife, I was able to relate with the emotion that your poem so easily conveyed. I also give you major props for the time and attention to detail it must have taken to add all the code for coloring and spacing - even to the point where you had to split a word into two different colors. Anyone who has had to use HTML tags knows how repetative something like was. I'm also guessing that unless your a computer whiz - it probably took a couple of previews before you were sure that you had it correct. It looks great and deserves a 5 rating and several ribbons, sadly I cannot afford to give you that but I hope a 100 GPs will keep you encouraged to continue writing so well.
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Review by SirWilliamII
Rated: E | (5.0)
8:22 but I must admit that even though I have read all of the books and would consider myself a good fan, it was harder than I expected to find all the names. I have given thought to the missing letters and I as well have been unable to think of any, but I wonder if you were to check the Black's family tree if you couldn't find a name there that really isn't thought of becuase they were mainly just a list of names. I really enjoyed it on main points. First I love Harry Potter and second, your list was written alphabetically. I guess I'm just OCD, but I only prefer to do word lists that are in ABC order. Thanks again for the fun! I'm going to post it publically hopefuly to get you some more exposure to maybe find another Harry Potter fan that could help you find the missing letters - that is if there is any at all.
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Review of How can I  
Review by SirWilliamII
Rated: E | (4.0)
There are many that question why the world has suffering at all when there is such a loving benevolent God. It is very hard to answer that question and your piece does offer a glimpse on that. My college education taught me a lot of theology and I will offer my opinion. God is 100% Love and 100% Justice. When God created the world, the Garden of Eden was also 100% Love and 100% Justice, but when sin entered the world, the two - Love and Justice - were no longer compatible in every situation and can only be found 100% of both in God. The splitting of Love/Justice along with humans’ ‘Free Will’ have allowed a lot of things to take place and exist in this world - changing it from a perfect world to a perverted world that contains evil things. Does this limit God - in no way. God CAN intervene but he can also walk through things along side of us, even carrying us at times. A weightlifter can only become legitimately stronger through facing the challenges of the weights. As a person we can only become a better person by facing the challenges of life. Sadly a lot of people choose not to face them but try to cheat and circumnavigate those challenges and/or moral truths that would better them. This self-destructive selfishness puts the load shirked onto another’s shoulders. AIDS, abortion, children dying of hunger, wars, car accidents, suicide of an ignored teen, are all perfect examples of one person’s greedy choices destroying the lives of others. In the perfect world of 100% Love joined with 100% Justice, each person would not be able to shirk responsibilities and would be the only one effected by their decisions - resulting in the strongest humans physically, mentally, spiritually, and socially that could ever exist! God and believing in Him is the source of strength for those who choose to face life, become stronger, and as a result, be able to guide and lift up others. I guess my reply was less of a review and more of a post, but I hope that if you are Jerry or know Jerry, that my education and opinion could be of benefit to you.
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Review by SirWilliamII
Rated: E | (5.0)
Absolutely great and inspirational. The mechanics of the poem worked well but the view on the topic and the flow was absolutely amazing. You were able to say alot in just a few words - the ultimate challenge and lure of poetry in my humble opinion. I am going to post this publically hoping that you will recieve a bunch more hits on this poem.
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Review by SirWilliamII
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
LMAO, I absolutely loved the story. I live in the country where cows are a dime a dozen and I agree with your characters - I've never met an evil cow but I sure would have made a quick exit as well. I found no mistakes in the telling or the conventions. I think you are a marvoulous writer and I must add that my mother would realy enjoy the story as well - She has relentlessly told me that the greatest treat she could hope for growing up was a Moon Pie. That made me laugh twice as hard when it was thrown. Great Job!
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