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Review of ~Childlike Demons  
Review by Cruce~Salus
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hello again,
It must seem like I go around handing out 5's, but I assure that isn't true. I love your way of writing and percieving emotion. I really like your comparisons, and I was drew to this poem by just the title.
My favorite line is "Playing with undying angels, bound in hate," because it just really helps me to understand the whole poem a little better. I had to read this poem a couple times over to understand it, but I liked everything about it. The paralellism and everything. Keep writing so I can keep reading.
Ciera
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Review by Cruce~Salus
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I believe this is a wonderful poem as well, but it didn't quite get that emotion part of me quite as aware. In the third stanza I don't understand what you mean by "maggots kiss my tenderly" do you mean me? Just wondering but overall a good and dark write.
Ciera
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Review by Cruce~Salus
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hey, sorry I wasn't able to review more sooner but here is the start of several to come, hopefully. I hate to see a poem or something someone has wrote without a rating, that is why I shall try and review this wonderful piece.
I love the repetition as well as the very deep drawn words. The words seem to make more sense when the poem reveals who the narrator is. There are a few parts that are just unclear to me, what do you mean when you say "eyes of green in an earth of brown?" This poem made me think very deeply and I applaud your hard work because it takes a lot to get me to think deeply. Great read.
Write on
UnresolvedDarkness
Ciera
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Review by Cruce~Salus
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hi, this is the review you requested from
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I want to say sorry for the delay. I have had some things come up in my life so, thanks for understanding. I am not sure if I am completely qualified to review this. I haven't ever read any of the anime comedy things.
I think there are a few things you need to work on here. Watch out for choppy sentences. Also, try to be careful on how you shift from different subjects. Other than that it is good. (Considering I don't know what or who Bobobo-bo Bo-bobo is)
Thanks for your interest, and I hope this review helped you.
Ciera
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