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Review of Crops  
Review by Henry Quinn
Rated: E | (3.5)
This is a wonderful macabre story in my eyes. You assembled a strong concept, one very unique.

However, I will say that the despite the strong concept and appropriate level of tension, I feel the story is unfinished. I'm not saying it's bad - I'm saying that the story might hold up stronger with additional content.

What I mean by this is that; what happens to Jonathon after the overwhelming discovery? He discovered the truth of the farm; but the story leaves it at that.

Of course, some stories are best when they leave a suspenseful ending; expecting the audience to speculate what would happen then.
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Review by Henry Quinn
Rated: E | (4.0)
The message conveyed in the short story is empowering. It successfully expresses human's natural tendency to react negatively against blatant stinginess. What I liked was how introspective the narrator was. The narrator questioned themselves over the incident and eventually felt guilty. However, I believe the narrator reacted on a fairly reasonable level; even if it did mean scooping down on one's level. As I mentioned, it's only natural for hurt feelings to show.

It was better (not emotionally perse, more so on rational means) for the narrator to convey the feelings more mildly. Bottling one's feelings is a temporary solution that will come back and haunt them.

I also loved the twist in the end. The feeling that despite rough beginnings, the quarter appeared as a resemblance of "luck" or perhaps mere coincidence.
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