Catching Idle Butterflies

Chicken II

Well, I just placed "Invalid Item"  in my portfolio.

It has 13 chapters, but they are short. The entire story is about 25,000 words, so it shouldn't take too long to read.

I do, however, want honest reviews on it, regardless of how brutal, both on grammar and content, so I can determine whether or not it's worthy to show around at the writer's conference.

Thank you muchly in advance!

PS If you don't know why I hesitated to put it up in the first place, see "Chicken"