Starting Over...

How does this sound?

I wrote the clinical lab manager today asking for an update. How does this sound?

Hello ____________,

I was wondering if you could give me some sort timeline for when you will make your decision about the clinical laboratory scientist position. I have already turned down another position (albeit a much less desireable one) because I'm still holding out hope that I'm a strong candidate for the one available in your lab. I am still very interested, but am worried your decision would not be made before my current position ends (Dec. 31st). I would need to begin working before that time to prevent a lapse in service and loss of benefits.

I truly don't mean to be pushy; even a vague estimate would give me some idea as to whether or not I should be more aggressive in job searching elsewhere.

Thanks Again,