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Rated: 18+ · Book · Personal · #1455359
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#604361 added November 10, 2008 at 8:18am
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The Betrayal: the follow up
This is a 55 word story I wrote. I added some notes at the end.

















SLAM!














“He gone and I glad,” I tell Teddy.





I look at my other friend.








"Why you not wake me up? I could run. Hide. Why you not make me disappear?


He hurt me.  I bleeding. You ‘pose help little ones. YOU PROMISED. I HATE YOU,"








I cry as I throw Teddy at Jesus’ picture.


55 word story






I wrote The Betrayal for a Writer's Cramp contest but I have to add a follow up. I think that Jesus hurts with us. God does not plan or create evil but people can choose to do evil. I think Jesus is hurting along with the little girl in the story. I know I didn't choose what happened to me as a child but God has choosen to make something beautiful out of my life. Especially when I let Him. Jesus is a gentleman. He asks to be let in, knocks on doors and waits for us to come to Him. Sometimes I think my bouts of depression are not just chemical imbalances but fights with God. Knowing and Doing are two different things. I know some of this is very cryptic but I hope to flesh it out when I have more time



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