L'aura del Campo

Winter haikus

My favorite part of "winter" is the first and last snow and any day when the sun shines... like earlier. So 5 winter haikus.

1.

Swiftly snow falls,
a carpet for sandaled-feet
of the bobcat

Not a haiku but haiku-ish: (English syllables: 3/7/3; 11/14/7 Japanese 'on'); a seasonal word, snow; the comma cuts it into two parts; two images (more-or-less), snow and bobcat. What does it evoke? Maybe "silent" would be better than "swiftly'. It could evoke the silence of a heavy snow or the awe of seeing a bobcat. I dunno... I only write this stuff.

2.

Carpet of fresh
snow — sandaled footprints
of the bobcat

(4/5/4; 9/15/7) em-mark to break, a clearer two images than above and doesn't feel like a sentence. Evokes? Awe maybe.

3.

Carrots sweetened
by frost — grey whiskers
over thin lips

This one is (4/5/4 σ or 9/10/8 'on') frost indicates season (autumn, early winter), the em-mark — cuts into two parts, grey whiskers indicates age. It could evoke "age", maybe the sweetness of growing old.

4.

Pale yellow rays —
geraniums lean towards
frosted windows

(4/6/4 or 8/14/10) again frosted indicates winter, the juxtaposition might evoke longing or hope.

5.

A figure huddled
in blankets — one bulb
lights the hovel

Hmm... has a cutting punctuation. But what is the season? Winter is implied by 'huddled in blankets'. What emotion evoked? Sadness or loneliness maybe as poverty is also implied. (5/5/4 or 8/13/7)

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