My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
THE POEM
The poem was a respectful tribute for those who have passed away in war. The use of Flanders Field and poppy seeds stirs up images of World War I.
WHAT I LIKED
I liked the compare/contrast of the battlefield to be followed by flowers.
STRUCTURE
This is a free form poem.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC to increase the font and make it red. It made the poem easier to read on the website.
DESCRIPTIONS
I liked: Along with crimson poppies, military cemeteries appeared," This is a striking visual - where poppies mark a battlefield and a cemeteries and it stirs a sense of gratitude for those who sacrificed.
All four of my daughters were vets from the moment of birth. They were all born while I was on Active Duty, were born in Army hospitals, and bounced back and forth between the U.S. and West Germany with their mom and me (the eldest ones more than once).
Ouch. Too real for me today. I was homeless years ago and Montana has a high vet population struggling with personal issues. This literally could be today's headlines here.
My comment is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
THE POEM
The poem is a nice tribute to a military mother.
WHAT I LIKED
I can totally relate to this poem having served in the military myself. There are often times one worries and finds things to pass the time, but their loved one is never far from their hearts.
STRUCTURE
This is a villanelle. A villanelle is a highly structured poem with 5 tercets and ends with a quatrain. There are 2 repeating rythmes and 2 repeating refrains. The poem followed the structure. I thought the repeating refrains were very respectful and reverent. There's a nice rythme and flow when spoken outloud.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to increase font and make easier to read on the website.
DESCRIPTIONS
I liked: With steadfast devotion, she prays to relieve the anxiety" The description draws up a visual of a mother, prayerful, with a holy book, or a passage, heart on their sleeve, looking to find peace. It's a great description and taps into somber emotion well.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
The opening engages the reader. The title is a nice fit for the poem. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest.
Buffalo soldies
made their mark in history
showing bravery
and tenaciousness in spades,
despite racial prejudice
and native unrest.
For years of loyal service,
we still salute them.
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My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
THE POEM
WHAT I LIKED
