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Bring Me Your Wandering Writing

by SB Musing

Rated: GC · Book · Fantasy · #2098554

Where all sorts of contest entries of 2020 come together, short story and poetry.

Welcome to my entries of poetry, short stories, of all different ways of writing...

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And, my poetry Lair, as of March 2017 + MARCH 2020
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For Cinn

"Pursue the Horizon - Open for Signups"

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10 Most Recent Blog Comments:

SB Musing

May 29, 2020 at 7:21pm
In response to "Invalid Entry"

MirandaCookies IS IN COLLEGE You are always welcome to show me the stuff that is a little off base and then I can improve it!

That's my happy face at having a second pair of eyes besides my own, well, besides my glasses which makes it six then. I am always a fan of your reviews and improvements you give me. *nudge, nudge, starts hacking*

I feel like I had a hard time transitioning from the home to the bank. I felt like the bank was a good feel to it. I feel like maybe middle could be played with? I'll reread it giving it some waiting time then see.

And yes! I'll take your cookies!

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MirandaCookies IS IN COLLEGE

May 29, 2020 at 6:20pm
In response to "Invalid Entry"

Well. Yeah, so this is great. Seriously! It seems slightly heartbreaking and suspenseful. I enjoyed this. Great prompt, and execution. I do see a few things out of place, but this is just a writing exercise so I shall shush about it.

🍪🍪🍪🍪

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SB Musing

May 4, 2020 at 4:12pm
In response to "Invalid Entry"

Hey there Sumojo! Thanks so much for reading and commenting on my story! I like these characters too and Elize totally gets in her own way with things. Luckily, Mac is pretty easy going and isn't surprised by her brain being... let's say, overreactive is a good word? Thank you again for commenting and giving me feedback!

Sumojo

May 4, 2020 at 5:48am
In response to "Invalid Entry"

I really like the concept of this story. Elize is ready to move on in the relationship but her fears are overwhelming her. This follows really well what we were asked for in this assignment. Elize is the one who really wants to move their relationship on to the next level but is afraid she may ruin things if she pushes Mack too far. Her concerns and his reactions to them are well portrayed. Well done.
Cheers Sue

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Merry QPdoll

Apr 26, 2020 at 8:21am
In response to "Invalid Entry"

Hello, SB Musing

!

I have just read "Invalid Entry"

and would like to share my thoughts.

PLEASE REMEMBER, these are only my thoughts and opinions.

Overall Impression
You definitely created some sexual tension with this piece.

I think your title is where the sexual tension begins, and that's a good thing. It reminded me of a song by Salt-N-Pepa called "Push It."

Music is a great way to instill sexual tension. Excellent choice.

However, I feel this story was a bit rushed. We had 2000 words to use for this assignment. I feel like you could have worked this out to be a little longer and therefore, prolonging that sexual tension.

My Favorite Part:
The fact that they were so carefree with their affection was my favorite part.

Setting:
This story took place in a car and a bakery. A bit of description for both places might bring the reader more into the story.

Plot:

[Visit the entry for more...]

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SB Musing

Apr 22, 2020 at 12:54pm
In response to "Invalid Entry"

Sumojo Thanks so much for commenting! I am expanding it but got caught up with where to go.

prettypoetry The class is this one right here: "Building Sensuality Class Forum"

. We're in class right now, should be going on for a month or more. But, I'm sure they'll reopen back up and you could join for what class speaks to you. It's helpful and we get good feedback!

iKïyå§ama

Apr 18, 2020 at 5:24am
In response to "Invalid Entry"

What a wonderful story of positivity and the building of great self-esteem!
Thanks for the fun read and your entry!

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SB Musing

Apr 14, 2020 at 9:42pm
In response to "Invalid Entry"

Luckie 🍀 Lol, I love how you sat that it's a bit disgusting but you like it. And good deal then, I hit the horror points I wanted to with the story. Thanks so much for reading and commenting on it! I wanted to have it be quick, fast, but grotesque as well.

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Luckie 🍀

Apr 13, 2020 at 10:58pm
In response to "Invalid Entry"

This was a fun little read! And a bit disgusting lol i like it!!! It made me wonder what these people did to end up in this situation, especially Claire and and the woman who got her thumb cut off! That made me shudder!! Great job!

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SB Musing

Apr 12, 2020 at 9:43am
In response to "Invalid Entry"

Sumojo Thanks so much for the feedback and I totally edited it thanks to your suggestion. I agree, it reads better, thanks so much again for reading and commenting! I didn't know how to jump forward with them so I was hoping it was smooth. I like to go painfully slow with my characters if they like each other so had to push them forward to that further time in dating and hope they played well.

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#14. Whose Afraid of Boogey?
ID #984484 entered on May 28, 2020 at 2:38pm

#13. Erotica: Take It Off [18+]
ID #984373 entered on May 26, 2020 at 5:30pm

#12. Novel: Outline 1 & 2
ID #980138 entered on April 11, 2020 at 6:44pm

#11. Of History and Hope BY MILLER WILLIAMS
ID #979045 entered on March 24, 2020 at 12:01pm

#10. Jet BY TONY HOAGLAND
ID #978031 entered on March 13, 2020 at 6:34pm

#9. Day 10- An Ode to March
ID #977699 entered on March 10, 2020 at 12:13pm

#8. March 5th
ID #977692 entered on March 10, 2020 at 11:39am

#7. Poison Me To Set Me Free
ID #976229 entered on February 24, 2020 at 1:52pm

#6. Cinémathèque BY CHARLES NORTH
ID #907991 entered on March 30, 2017 at 11:56pm

#5. Day 21- Protagonist Changling
ID #895123 entered on October 21, 2016 at 2:52pm

#4. Day 7- Cultural Setting
ID #893883 entered on October 7, 2016 at 3:34pm

#3. Day 5- 15 minute free style
ID #893714 entered on October 5, 2016 at 3:11pm

#2. Day 4- Big baddies - Antagonists
ID #893712 entered on October 5, 2016 at 2:53pm

#1. Day 3 - Main Character Profile Expanded
ID #893711 entered on October 5, 2016 at 2:51pm

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