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Poetic Tides Through Time

by tucknits

Rated: E · Book · Educational · #2113747

Poems that pursue the horizon from past to present and poems created for NaPoWriMo 2017

March 2017
Entries #1-#33

April 2017
Entries #35-65

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10 Most Recent Blog Comments:

Katya the Poet

Apr 30, 2017 at 7:23pm
In response to "Beyond Babylon"

I have so enjoyed reading your work and seeing the great variety of your poems this month! Loved learning about these various forms you tried!

Joy

Apr 30, 2017 at 2:39pm
In response to "Beyond Babylon"

Nice work with the form and I believe the poem has more to do with the love of a horse or the horse riding, and I felt a certain sadness at the last stanza.

"Rusty remnant remains" great refrain with alliteration and meaning for each reader to interpret from himself or herself. I can see from the meaning why you changed the refrain in the last few stanzas and added it back in question form.

It has been a wonderful April, and I felt such pleasure reading your poems. I hope you continue writing poetry throughout the coming months.

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Joy

Apr 30, 2017 at 2:22pm
In response to "Imagine..."

That poor newsman! I bet giving the bad news hurt him more than the news itself.

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Katya the Poet

Apr 28, 2017 at 10:29pm
In response to "A memory..."

Lovely poem. So glad you tried the ghazal!

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alfred booth, wanbli ska

Apr 28, 2017 at 12:20pm
In response to "A memory..."

The form is perfectly rendered, thank you for trying it and discovering it is not as difficult as it seems.

On a purely poetic note, I would change the title so it doesn't include the all-important rhyme word "cherry" which is the build-up of the poem. For the same reason in the fourth stanza, I would not yet unveil the true name of the fruit, but let that linger for the last line of the poem. Also, "bore large fruit cherries" is redundant, as I know of no meat or vegetable that is also called a cherry without cherry being a variety as with the tomato, which does not grow on a tree! I know why you used the redundancy, for a syllable count, but it doesn't work. "Bore large round cherries" is an easy solution to correct this particular situation. "Bore large heart shaped fruit" would let you leave the cherry surprise for the end.

A tiny bit of nit-picking.
As for the rhyme "clary" the only definition I find is that of a type of herb. Difficult to find in a tree. Had the same problem not knowing any definition of "eyrie" but since you speak of the curved branch seat in the second line, a large bird's nest can apply here.

Write on! Ghazals are fun!

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Joy

Apr 27, 2017 at 10:40pm
In response to "Joker"

Who doesn't love a horse! Lovely!

alfred booth, wanbli ska

Apr 27, 2017 at 12:39pm
In response to "Joker"

Lovely and lyrical.

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Joy

Apr 26, 2017 at 7:27pm
In response to "Perpetual Motion "

Yes, ten years is a long time. I love the part after "I'll face the fear"

Joy

Apr 25, 2017 at 2:08pm
In response to "One Special Christmas"

Nice! You brought Christmas into April so vividly, and the villanelle form fits the Christmas Spirit.

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Katya the Poet

Apr 24, 2017 at 9:23pm
In response to "Wrong Way"

The force in here is scary. Powerful poem.

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#71. A Plucky Poem
ID #905696 entered on March 31, 2017 at 9:44pm

#70. Thrice Alone
ID #905761 entered on March 1, 2017 at 5:18pm

#69. The Children's Hour
ID #906696 entered on March 31, 2017 at 9:40pm

#68. The Duel
ID #906697 entered on March 31, 2017 at 9:38pm

#67. My Shadow
ID #906699 entered on March 31, 2017 at 9:36pm

#66. Foreign Lands
ID #906700 entered on March 31, 2017 at 9:34pm

#65. Who Has Seen The Wind?
ID #906701 entered on March 31, 2017 at 9:32pm

#64. A Mortifying Mistake
ID #906703 entered on March 31, 2017 at 9:30pm

#63. Seein' Things
ID #906704 entered on March 31, 2017 at 9:28pm

#62. The Captain's Daughter
ID #906706 entered on March 31, 2017 at 9:26pm

#61. If -
ID #906709 entered on March 31, 2017 at 9:23pm

#60. When As A Lad
ID #906721 entered on March 31, 2017 at 9:19pm

#59. A Boy's Song
ID #906762 entered on March 31, 2017 at 9:11pm

#58. The Sin Of Omission
ID #906735 entered on March 31, 2017 at 9:09pm

#57. She Walks In Beauty
ID #906713 entered on March 31, 2017 at 9:07pm

#56. The Elf And The Dormouse
ID #906715 entered on March 31, 2017 at 9:06pm

#55. Spinning
ID #906746 entered on March 31, 2017 at 9:03pm

#54. A Lost Chord
ID #906744 entered on March 31, 2017 at 8:54pm

#53. What is Life?
ID #907051 entered on March 31, 2017 at 8:47pm

#52. Martha
ID #907889 entered on March 31, 2017 at 8:44pm

#51. The Rainy Day
ID #906740 entered on March 31, 2017 at 8:43pm

#50. A Farewell
ID #906743 entered on March 31, 2017 at 8:39pm

#49. Next of Kin
ID #906745 entered on March 31, 2017 at 8:37pm

#48. The Arrow And The Song
ID #906732 entered on March 31, 2017 at 8:35pm

#47. Castles In The Air
ID #906724 entered on March 31, 2017 at 8:33pm

#46. Excelsior
ID #906731 entered on March 31, 2017 at 8:32pm

#45. The Fisher's Widow
ID #906730 entered on March 31, 2017 at 8:30pm

#44. The Angler
ID #906733 entered on March 31, 2017 at 8:28pm

#43. "It is marvelous to wake up together…" & Eros
ID #906739 entered on March 31, 2017 at 8:27pm

#42. To Helen
ID #906728 entered on March 31, 2017 at 8:25pm

#41. I Am Lonely
ID #906722 entered on March 31, 2017 at 8:23pm

#40. A Song Of Living
ID #906738 entered on March 13, 2017 at 4:11pm

#39. Eros
ID #906726 entered on March 13, 2017 at 3:44pm

#38. ************************************************************
ID #908050 entered on March 31, 2017 at 10:54pm

#37. Apocalyptic Resistance
ID #908060 entered on April 2, 2017 at 1:39pm

#36. Fresh Fish
ID #908069 entered on August 24, 2022 at 12:44pm

#35. If you didn't document it, you didn't do it
ID #908072 entered on April 3, 2017 at 2:55pm

#34. Gateway
ID #908132 entered on August 20, 2022 at 3:34pm

#33. WIPs, UFOs and Fairies
ID #908277 entered on April 5, 2017 at 11:23am

#32. Dream Stream
ID #908308 entered on April 6, 2017 at 10:04pm

#31. Ode to Merit Badges
ID #908311 entered on April 9, 2017 at 12:12am

#30. illicit escape~
ID #908366 entered on October 30, 2017 at 10:37pm

#29. Proof of Death
ID #908310 entered on April 9, 2017 at 3:18pm

#28. Spring Snow
ID #908347 entered on April 10, 2017 at 10:43am

#27. DNA Banished
ID #908601 entered on April 11, 2017 at 11:28am

#26. Unexpected Consequence
ID #908909 entered on April 13, 2017 at 10:05am

#25. Baubles, Bangles and...
ID #909024 entered on April 14, 2017 at 3:40pm

#24. Trinkets in Trimeter
ID #909043 entered on April 14, 2017 at 7:13pm

#23. Night Flight
ID #908714 entered on April 14, 2017 at 4:18pm

#22. Common Cents
ID #908697 entered on April 9, 2017 at 4:16pm

#21. color me empty
ID #909065 entered on April 15, 2017 at 8:22pm

#20. Proclivity
ID #909399 entered on April 18, 2017 at 7:00pm

#19. Heroes
ID #909396 entered on April 18, 2017 at 3:14pm

#18. Middle Muse
ID #909425 entered on August 20, 2022 at 5:53pm

#17. compassion's demise
ID #909461 entered on April 20, 2017 at 10:59am

#16. Anchored
ID #909592 entered on April 22, 2017 at 9:52am

#15. 2:22
ID #909635 entered on April 22, 2017 at 11:46am

#14. Sonnet Saga
ID #909645 entered on April 23, 2017 at 10:33am

#13. Wrong Way
ID #908706 entered on May 16, 2017 at 6:07pm

#12. One Special Christmas
ID #909664 entered on April 24, 2017 at 12:11pm

#11. Perpetual Motion
ID #909901 entered on September 20, 2022 at 6:12pm

#10. Joker
ID #909921 entered on April 27, 2017 at 11:18am

#9. A memory...
ID #909904 entered on May 1, 2017 at 3:48pm

#8. Imagine...
ID #910112 entered on April 29, 2017 at 6:14pm

#7. Beyond Babylon
ID #909925 entered on April 30, 2017 at 12:13pm

#6. ************************************************************
ID #910237 entered on May 1, 2017 at 12:52pm

#5. Jottings, thoughts, ideas
ID #910113 entered on April 30, 2017 at 6:35pm

#4. May Day, mayday!
ID #910231 entered on May 13, 2017 at 9:36am

#3. Time Passages
ID #937190 entered on July 1, 2018 at 2:47pm

#2. Disappointment
ID #937288 entered on July 4, 2018 at 12:12pm

#1. July 4th Expectations - Dashed
ID #937403 entered on July 4, 2018 at 12:45pm

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