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Blog - A Young Writer's Journey

by WriterAngel

Rated: 18+ · Book · Internet/Web · #2256499

A blog documenting my writing journey

I hope this is entertaining... :)

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tracker

Nov 1, 2023 at 6:05pm
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You wrote "I hope this is entertaining... :)" Yes indeed I am totally blown away by your poetry blog. I have never seen anything like it! Hi, I am tracker. I have had some contact with you because I have fan'd you. I wonder if there is anywhere the system tells you when you did that? After being here awhile you can accumulate a whole lot of fans. Your adjectives stand out. "Squishy, suctioned, autumnal, fleshy for example. Who does that better than you do? I am really impressed. I only have one question. What is your name IRL so I can look on Amazon? Take care.
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Kåre เลียม Enga

Jun 15, 2023 at 11:46pm
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Yes, keep trying. The syntax seems a bit twisted, making the rhymes seem forced, so it doesn't flow smoothly.

The use of -ast and -erst rhymes was good though.

Title: would "Palm Reading" be better?

WriterAngel

Jun 7, 2023 at 11:40am
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Thank you so much for the feedback and kind words! I didn't even think of that hymn, although that's one of my faves.

It's a good idea to expand it a bit. I wrote it originally for Express It in Eight, but I could certainly keep working on it more...

Kåre เลียม Enga

Jun 5, 2023 at 11:56pm
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I really liked this. The use of 7/7/7/7 divide 3/4 or 4/3 reminds me of the hymn "Rock of Ages" and adds a musical component to these two verses.

There could be more... a third verse going back in time... maybe two verses... and then a last verse back to the present/future/ancient-past.

I have a variety of traumas and triggers. Not all memories are unpleasant but bad ones once triggered take me back. Photos work well for me, occasionally music (but more for emotion), and fragrance.

Use of the 5 senses to describe a before time might be interesting.

Now I'm back at my grandparents... circa 1960: a red cardinal, smell of rotten tomatoes, lilacs (May 1963), cold floor of the basement (we slept there on hot nights in August), flash of the fireflies, the slant of the hillside, the red sidewalk and white tires of nasturtiums, taste of split pea soup, and fresh baking bread (twice/week). Sound of? Maybe the porch swing... ah... the whistle of the steam engine (Pennsylvania RR main line).

Thank you for taking me down the dirt/gravel path through the hollow.

Ray Scrivener

Mar 31, 2022 at 2:49pm
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Hey, no rush on the writing front! I'm currently trying to work around my own responsibilities so we'll figure things out when we can.

And careful tossing that praise around, we haven't even dipped our toes in the story yet

Can't wait to see where these pirate adventures lead!

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S. Serpent

Mar 13, 2022 at 7:23am
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Maybe I'm overthinking things, but I quite enjoyed this little poem. Maybe it's the fact that the poem is in the shape of a pyramid, but I think of ascension. I know you like hiking, so I wouldn't be surprised if some of this was molded from those experiences.

Tryst is such a funny word for me; each time I run into the word, I've already forgotten what it means. I had to google it to remind me. Here's hoping this poem lets it stick for me.

Great use of the elements, the sensations makes this place rather bitter yet beautiful to me--like a mountain.

Keep it up! You've always had a great vocabulary right up your sleeve!

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Ray Scrivener

Dec 17, 2021 at 4:30pm
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Omelette du fromage, oui oui. But seriously, I've forgotten all but a handful of vocabulary and a snippet of grammar. I really want to get my French passport but that means studying French again to pass a language test. New Year's resolution maybe?

WriterAngel

Dec 17, 2021 at 4:26pm
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Holy shit! That's so cool! Do you speak French?

Ray Scrivener

Dec 17, 2021 at 4:16pm
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Citizen, thank you very much! (Even though it's only on account of my father, but hey.)

WriterAngel

Dec 17, 2021 at 3:53pm
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Never would I have suspected that there was a Francophile in our midst! :)

December 17, 2021 at 2:32pm

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With some feedback from...

...Ray, I expanded my Express It in Eight poem to be a little longer for the Shadows and Light contest.

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December 17, 2021 at 12:41pm

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Alouettes Ain't Easy

I joined the Poet's Place, and I'm still greedily lapping up all the fun poems and wealth of advice over in that forum. This week's form is the alouette, a French poetry form that's rather involved. (Why are the French forms so difficult?!) Unfortunately, I have a feeling this one will make Ray Scrivener

throw up a little in his mouth.

Christmas Commerce

Twinkle, snowy lights,
bare trees glimmer bright,
reveal rivers of down coats.
Patter, footsteps, thrum,
like drummer boy’s pum,
under carols’ airy notes.

Misty, spectral puffs,
framed by fuzzed earmuffs,
frosts fog on toy shop windows.
Billows of warm air
result in murmured prayer
as revolving doors spin, close.

Glowing gazes explore,
roam throughout the store,
come to rest on perfect gifts.
Imagine glad face,
a loved one’s embrace,
this symbol of care uplifts.

Alouette
6 lines per stanza
2+ stanzas
Syllables: 5, 5, 7, 5, 5, 7
Rhyme: a, a, b, c, c, b
Generally accented on third syllable of each line

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December 17, 2021 at 11:11am

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Riding Waves

The prompt in Express It in Eight today was a song. I LOVE music prompts. This one made me think of surfing... :)

My gaze brushes the edges of distant surf,
inklings of coming joy curl dark corners of licked lips.
Eyes exhilarate as soft velcro chafes excited ankles.
Starting forward, tight fingers grip smooth, rounded board.

Reassuring chill of briny water splashes churning shins,
incoming waves slap high fives against tanned hips.
Leaning forward, I kerplunk into cool pleasure.
Swimming toward curls in the sea, all is right.

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