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Blog - A Young Writer's Journey

by WriterAngel

Rated: 18+ · Book · Internet/Web · #2256499

A blog documenting my writing journey

I hope this is entertaining... :)

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tracker

Nov 1, 2023 at 6:05pm
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You wrote "I hope this is entertaining... :)" Yes indeed I am totally blown away by your poetry blog. I have never seen anything like it! Hi, I am tracker. I have had some contact with you because I have fan'd you. I wonder if there is anywhere the system tells you when you did that? After being here awhile you can accumulate a whole lot of fans. Your adjectives stand out. "Squishy, suctioned, autumnal, fleshy for example. Who does that better than you do? I am really impressed. I only have one question. What is your name IRL so I can look on Amazon? Take care.
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Kåre เลียม Enga

Jun 15, 2023 at 11:46pm
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Yes, keep trying. The syntax seems a bit twisted, making the rhymes seem forced, so it doesn't flow smoothly.

The use of -ast and -erst rhymes was good though.

Title: would "Palm Reading" be better?

WriterAngel

Jun 7, 2023 at 11:40am
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Thank you so much for the feedback and kind words! I didn't even think of that hymn, although that's one of my faves.

It's a good idea to expand it a bit. I wrote it originally for Express It in Eight, but I could certainly keep working on it more...

Kåre เลียม Enga

Jun 5, 2023 at 11:56pm
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I really liked this. The use of 7/7/7/7 divide 3/4 or 4/3 reminds me of the hymn "Rock of Ages" and adds a musical component to these two verses.

There could be more... a third verse going back in time... maybe two verses... and then a last verse back to the present/future/ancient-past.

I have a variety of traumas and triggers. Not all memories are unpleasant but bad ones once triggered take me back. Photos work well for me, occasionally music (but more for emotion), and fragrance.

Use of the 5 senses to describe a before time might be interesting.

Now I'm back at my grandparents... circa 1960: a red cardinal, smell of rotten tomatoes, lilacs (May 1963), cold floor of the basement (we slept there on hot nights in August), flash of the fireflies, the slant of the hillside, the red sidewalk and white tires of nasturtiums, taste of split pea soup, and fresh baking bread (twice/week). Sound of? Maybe the porch swing... ah... the whistle of the steam engine (Pennsylvania RR main line).

Thank you for taking me down the dirt/gravel path through the hollow.

Ray Scrivener

Mar 31, 2022 at 2:49pm
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Hey, no rush on the writing front! I'm currently trying to work around my own responsibilities so we'll figure things out when we can.

And careful tossing that praise around, we haven't even dipped our toes in the story yet

Can't wait to see where these pirate adventures lead!

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S. Serpent

Mar 13, 2022 at 7:23am
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Maybe I'm overthinking things, but I quite enjoyed this little poem. Maybe it's the fact that the poem is in the shape of a pyramid, but I think of ascension. I know you like hiking, so I wouldn't be surprised if some of this was molded from those experiences.

Tryst is such a funny word for me; each time I run into the word, I've already forgotten what it means. I had to google it to remind me. Here's hoping this poem lets it stick for me.

Great use of the elements, the sensations makes this place rather bitter yet beautiful to me--like a mountain.

Keep it up! You've always had a great vocabulary right up your sleeve!

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Ray Scrivener

Dec 17, 2021 at 4:30pm
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Omelette du fromage, oui oui. But seriously, I've forgotten all but a handful of vocabulary and a snippet of grammar. I really want to get my French passport but that means studying French again to pass a language test. New Year's resolution maybe?

WriterAngel

Dec 17, 2021 at 4:26pm
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Holy shit! That's so cool! Do you speak French?

Ray Scrivener

Dec 17, 2021 at 4:16pm
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Citizen, thank you very much! (Even though it's only on account of my father, but hey.)

WriterAngel

Dec 17, 2021 at 3:53pm
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Never would I have suspected that there was a Francophile in our midst! :)

November 29, 2022 at 6:25pm

#1041146

Ships Passing in the Night

Okay, so I wrote a story that's completely different than I've ever done before. The sci-fi contest for November was to write about first contact between humans and aliens. But the thought occurred to me: if aliens are truly alien, would we recognize them as even being alive? And vice versa?

So I wrote my story about what would happen if humans and aliens met and never even realized that they had. Kinda anti-climactic, I know, but hopefully original at least. We'll see if the contest runner likes it. It's short at a little under 1K, so give it a read and let me know what you think!

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November 28, 2022 at 8:42pm

#1041120

Antarctic Party

“Could you please pass the ice?”
“Could you be more precise?”
“Just a bit for my drink.”
“Sure, just give me a blink.”
“Whoa! I meant just a touch!
That’s a good bit too much!”
“Well, my hand’s a bit cold,
and this ‘berg broke the mold.”

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November 28, 2022 at 8:29pm

#1041118

Box of Mystery

A whisper nags
“What lies within…?”

for Grandma, her phone
for Schrödinger, his cat
for Cap’n Jack, his chest
for walked dogs, my house
for Pandora, her box
for me, his heart.

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November 22, 2022 at 1:34pm

#1040931

Something Wicked This Way Comes*

Sly smiles flash,
small hands smash
downward into steaming foam.

Backward thrash,
awesome splash,
fat drips rain from sud-soaked bangs.

Tyke giggling soggy jubilation,
fingers slither his soapy coronation.

*Based on actual events. ;)

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November 21, 2022 at 2:42pm

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Lady Industry

Burnt orange flesh flakes crunch and peel,
flutter from her once-strong steel.
Grinding gears of cycling seasons,
wobbly knee aches, twinging reasons.
Stumbling next, protesting pistons,
gravely seeking last existence.
Proud iron lady’s glum march slows,
gulping gasps turned dark death throes.

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November 19, 2022 at 1:31pm

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Magnetic Romance

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November 17, 2022 at 5:35pm

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Don't Poke Pink-Pigtailed Bears

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November 17, 2022 at 3:53pm

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Alien Home Alone Back to the Future Charades

Hand-mimed explosions
from a well-nourished belly
constitute mind corrosions
according to dear cousin Nelly.

I slap both my cheeks
and let loose a scream,
then laugh at Nelly's "Geeks!"
as Ron windmills an air guitar meme.

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November 16, 2022 at 11:08am

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Past the Smoke

Ash-stained faces grim,
proud tears glimmer, brim
from bright, exhausted eyes.

Sharp staccato crack
of branches now charred black,
soft plop into the crispy forest floor.

Newborn sunlight streams
through spidery openness.

Book: The Final Empire by Brandon Sanderson
Page 21: ash-stained
Page 34: openness

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November 15, 2022 at 12:39pm

#1040691

Sonic Poetry

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