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Blog - A Young Writer's Journey

by WriterAngel

Rated: 18+ · Book · Internet/Web · #2256499

A blog documenting my writing journey

I hope this is entertaining... :)

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tracker

Nov 1, 2023 at 6:05pm
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You wrote "I hope this is entertaining... :)" Yes indeed I am totally blown away by your poetry blog. I have never seen anything like it! Hi, I am tracker. I have had some contact with you because I have fan'd you. I wonder if there is anywhere the system tells you when you did that? After being here awhile you can accumulate a whole lot of fans. Your adjectives stand out. "Squishy, suctioned, autumnal, fleshy for example. Who does that better than you do? I am really impressed. I only have one question. What is your name IRL so I can look on Amazon? Take care.
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Kåre เลียม Enga

Jun 15, 2023 at 11:46pm
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Yes, keep trying. The syntax seems a bit twisted, making the rhymes seem forced, so it doesn't flow smoothly.

The use of -ast and -erst rhymes was good though.

Title: would "Palm Reading" be better?

WriterAngel

Jun 7, 2023 at 11:40am
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Thank you so much for the feedback and kind words! I didn't even think of that hymn, although that's one of my faves.

It's a good idea to expand it a bit. I wrote it originally for Express It in Eight, but I could certainly keep working on it more...

Kåre เลียม Enga

Jun 5, 2023 at 11:56pm
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I really liked this. The use of 7/7/7/7 divide 3/4 or 4/3 reminds me of the hymn "Rock of Ages" and adds a musical component to these two verses.

There could be more... a third verse going back in time... maybe two verses... and then a last verse back to the present/future/ancient-past.

I have a variety of traumas and triggers. Not all memories are unpleasant but bad ones once triggered take me back. Photos work well for me, occasionally music (but more for emotion), and fragrance.

Use of the 5 senses to describe a before time might be interesting.

Now I'm back at my grandparents... circa 1960: a red cardinal, smell of rotten tomatoes, lilacs (May 1963), cold floor of the basement (we slept there on hot nights in August), flash of the fireflies, the slant of the hillside, the red sidewalk and white tires of nasturtiums, taste of split pea soup, and fresh baking bread (twice/week). Sound of? Maybe the porch swing... ah... the whistle of the steam engine (Pennsylvania RR main line).

Thank you for taking me down the dirt/gravel path through the hollow.

Ray Scrivener

Mar 31, 2022 at 2:49pm
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Hey, no rush on the writing front! I'm currently trying to work around my own responsibilities so we'll figure things out when we can.

And careful tossing that praise around, we haven't even dipped our toes in the story yet

Can't wait to see where these pirate adventures lead!

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S. Serpent

Mar 13, 2022 at 7:23am
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Maybe I'm overthinking things, but I quite enjoyed this little poem. Maybe it's the fact that the poem is in the shape of a pyramid, but I think of ascension. I know you like hiking, so I wouldn't be surprised if some of this was molded from those experiences.

Tryst is such a funny word for me; each time I run into the word, I've already forgotten what it means. I had to google it to remind me. Here's hoping this poem lets it stick for me.

Great use of the elements, the sensations makes this place rather bitter yet beautiful to me--like a mountain.

Keep it up! You've always had a great vocabulary right up your sleeve!

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Ray Scrivener

Dec 17, 2021 at 4:30pm
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Omelette du fromage, oui oui. But seriously, I've forgotten all but a handful of vocabulary and a snippet of grammar. I really want to get my French passport but that means studying French again to pass a language test. New Year's resolution maybe?

WriterAngel

Dec 17, 2021 at 4:26pm
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Holy shit! That's so cool! Do you speak French?

Ray Scrivener

Dec 17, 2021 at 4:16pm
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Citizen, thank you very much! (Even though it's only on account of my father, but hey.)

WriterAngel

Dec 17, 2021 at 3:53pm
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Never would I have suspected that there was a Francophile in our midst! :)

March 31, 2023 at 12:11pm

#1047235

Blown Away

At trail’s terminus,
tresses whipping smiling lips,
I pirouette,
hands outstretched,
sculpting rivers of air
with unbridled exuberance,
gifting them
my civilized concerns.

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March 26, 2023 at 9:05pm

#1047025

Sci-fi Contest Cyberpunk Story is a Wrap!

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March 23, 2023 at 11:16am

#1046877

Fire Drill

*Brrrrrrrrrrzzzzzzzzzzzzzz*
Not rock concert loud,
yet oddly able to rumble
the very foundations of my soul,
its gut-twisting sound
that of a freighter-sized honey bee
lacking the nearby fragrance
of perfect pastel petals.

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March 22, 2023 at 11:38am

#1046840

Cyberpunk

Finished drafting my cyberpunk story for the sci-fi contest. An editing pass to go, then I'll post it. Feels good. It's been several months since I entered that contest, but I really like it...

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March 22, 2023 at 11:36am

#1046839

Carpe

Late winter day,
so much like the others,
horizon thick with billowed gray.

Reluctant to slip from the covers,
I will fatigue’s leaden inertia away.
Desire dominates indolent druthers.

I battle this dreary diem
in creativity’s audacious coliseum.

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March 17, 2023 at 12:13am

#1046479

Empowered

Daily, passing
shopping carts,
sleeping bags,
I grow numb.

Until the day
when I realize
I have the power
to help.

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March 16, 2023 at 11:59pm

#1046477

Tectonic Shift

just when i think
that this earthly firmament
is my foundation
it shudders

i’m reminded
that perpetuity
may only be found
in the ethereal

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March 15, 2023 at 1:45pm

#1046414

Contest Closed

An arsenal of St. Paddy’s limericks
champing at the edge of my childish brain,
I attempt to blink away
the stomach-sinking disappointment
at the pair of alliterative words
that form the title of the message
at the top of the forum:

“Contest Closed”.

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March 14, 2023 at 8:07pm

#1046397

Rite of Passage

A speech finished.
A burden diminished.

With a sigh and tinny plop,
I collapse into a folding chair,
careful not to snag my gown,
grinning to endless iterations
of Pomp and Circumstance.

A wistful tear slithers,
adolescence withers.

When the moment comes,
for the first time,
a two-fingered fling
of a black square cap
actually feels fitting.

A soggy-cheeked hug,
heartstrings tug.

Still, this isn’t the end.
Graduation to this new life,
so similar to the old,
except, for the first time,
it was mine.

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March 13, 2023 at 11:25pm

#1046370

Lost Soul Found

So easy to lose track
of my slippery soul
in the perpetual buzz
of work… people… play…

…so difficult to notice…

…until I find
a quiet moment
for vivacious verse.

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