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Blog - A Young Writer's Journey

by WriterAngel

Rated: 18+ · Book · Internet/Web · #2256499

A blog documenting my writing journey

I hope this is entertaining... :)

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tracker

Nov 1, 2023 at 6:05pm
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You wrote "I hope this is entertaining... :)" Yes indeed I am totally blown away by your poetry blog. I have never seen anything like it! Hi, I am tracker. I have had some contact with you because I have fan'd you. I wonder if there is anywhere the system tells you when you did that? After being here awhile you can accumulate a whole lot of fans. Your adjectives stand out. "Squishy, suctioned, autumnal, fleshy for example. Who does that better than you do? I am really impressed. I only have one question. What is your name IRL so I can look on Amazon? Take care.
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Kåre เลียม Enga

Jun 15, 2023 at 11:46pm
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Yes, keep trying. The syntax seems a bit twisted, making the rhymes seem forced, so it doesn't flow smoothly.

The use of -ast and -erst rhymes was good though.

Title: would "Palm Reading" be better?

WriterAngel

Jun 7, 2023 at 11:40am
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Thank you so much for the feedback and kind words! I didn't even think of that hymn, although that's one of my faves.

It's a good idea to expand it a bit. I wrote it originally for Express It in Eight, but I could certainly keep working on it more...

Kåre เลียม Enga

Jun 5, 2023 at 11:56pm
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I really liked this. The use of 7/7/7/7 divide 3/4 or 4/3 reminds me of the hymn "Rock of Ages" and adds a musical component to these two verses.

There could be more... a third verse going back in time... maybe two verses... and then a last verse back to the present/future/ancient-past.

I have a variety of traumas and triggers. Not all memories are unpleasant but bad ones once triggered take me back. Photos work well for me, occasionally music (but more for emotion), and fragrance.

Use of the 5 senses to describe a before time might be interesting.

Now I'm back at my grandparents... circa 1960: a red cardinal, smell of rotten tomatoes, lilacs (May 1963), cold floor of the basement (we slept there on hot nights in August), flash of the fireflies, the slant of the hillside, the red sidewalk and white tires of nasturtiums, taste of split pea soup, and fresh baking bread (twice/week). Sound of? Maybe the porch swing... ah... the whistle of the steam engine (Pennsylvania RR main line).

Thank you for taking me down the dirt/gravel path through the hollow.

Ray Scrivener

Mar 31, 2022 at 2:49pm
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Hey, no rush on the writing front! I'm currently trying to work around my own responsibilities so we'll figure things out when we can.

And careful tossing that praise around, we haven't even dipped our toes in the story yet

Can't wait to see where these pirate adventures lead!

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S. Serpent

Mar 13, 2022 at 7:23am
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Maybe I'm overthinking things, but I quite enjoyed this little poem. Maybe it's the fact that the poem is in the shape of a pyramid, but I think of ascension. I know you like hiking, so I wouldn't be surprised if some of this was molded from those experiences.

Tryst is such a funny word for me; each time I run into the word, I've already forgotten what it means. I had to google it to remind me. Here's hoping this poem lets it stick for me.

Great use of the elements, the sensations makes this place rather bitter yet beautiful to me--like a mountain.

Keep it up! You've always had a great vocabulary right up your sleeve!

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Ray Scrivener

Dec 17, 2021 at 4:30pm
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Omelette du fromage, oui oui. But seriously, I've forgotten all but a handful of vocabulary and a snippet of grammar. I really want to get my French passport but that means studying French again to pass a language test. New Year's resolution maybe?

WriterAngel

Dec 17, 2021 at 4:26pm
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Holy shit! That's so cool! Do you speak French?

Ray Scrivener

Dec 17, 2021 at 4:16pm
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Citizen, thank you very much! (Even though it's only on account of my father, but hey.)

WriterAngel

Dec 17, 2021 at 3:53pm
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Never would I have suspected that there was a Francophile in our midst! :)

April 26, 2022 at 12:01pm

#1031414

Time to Skedaddle

Time to Skedaddle

Calloused fingers trace lazy circles along silky rims.
Weighted corners of dry lips twitch fresh stubble,
hiccup burning oak incense of second-rate bourbon.
Inky flesh spirals beneath glazed mellow eyes,
mining deeper shadows within creased cheeks.
Uncrumpling chaps puff moonlit dust as knees quiver,
staggering languid zigzags across hollow planks.
Ragged breaths quiet into soothing arms of night’s embrace.

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April 25, 2022 at 11:07am

#1031343

maybe tomorrow

maybe tomorrow I’ll have something to say
maybe tomorrow my mind will not stray
maybe tomorrow I’ll find reasons to play
maybe tomorrow my muse won’t go away
maybe tomorrow I’ll break down and pray
maybe tomorrow my thoughts won’t decay
maybe tomorrow I won’t let guilt weigh
maybe tomorrow turns into today

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April 19, 2022 at 4:44pm

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A Grim Story

This was a tough one to write. Particularly since it's semi-based on someone I actually used to know. Before he committed suicide. Most of the rest of the story never happened, though. Writing this took me back to kind of a dark place. I'm kinda thinking I maybe shouldn't have tapped into this particular vein of inspo. Hits a little too close to home. :(

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April 15, 2022 at 11:36am

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Easter Poetry

My first foray into the kyrielle form...

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The French really seem to like the repeating verse. I don't blame them. I do too. :)

I like the syllable but not meter requirements too. You can use meter to make certain parts flow, but then disrupt the meter in other lines to make them feel jarring, yet still hit the required syllable count.

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April 14, 2022 at 7:06pm

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First Ever Limerick Win!

Yay! I finally won a limerick contest with my St. Patrick's Day flurry of limericks! The judges liked this one:

I thought we’d go out, but we’re stayin’.
She said, “Paddy’s a saint. We are prayin’.”
I can’t help but think,
“I’d much rather drink.”
My mistake was in that to her sayin’.

I sent back this response:

Thank you so much. You're so kind.
I'm glad the stars neatly aligned
to grant me a win.
I'm wearing a grin.
Anyone want an autograph signed?

(I kid, of course...

)

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April 13, 2022 at 3:45pm

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We All Scream…

Eyes squeezed shut,
freshly licked lips quiver,
eager fingers tremble,
cradling a crispy cone.

Sniffing saccharine scents,
a pink tongue slithers forth,
burrowing languid zig zags
into spheres of frosty cream.

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April 13, 2022 at 2:18pm

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This Week's Screamsy!

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April 8, 2022 at 4:44pm

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Great Song!

The new Banks album is finally out!

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April 8, 2022 at 4:43pm

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Prickly

Downturned eyes never meeting,
machine-like feet ever beating,
I flow through the prickly incoming tide of nylon shells.

Happy smiles prove so fleeting.
Why do few offer a greeting?
They seem so entwined in concrete-ensconced thoughts.

I chirp bright hellos as I’m eating,
laugh as shocked souls think I’m cheating.

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April 7, 2022 at 3:44pm

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Can't Wait!

For the latest Banks album to drop tomorrow...

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