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This week's Screams story:
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...how sometimes reviews are so diametrically opposed. On "Invalid Item" , I received this review: My my this poem is enough to make a grown man blush. I’m impressed! Your use of sound and word choice is absolutely exquisite. I love the touch where you actually even meaning sibilance in the poem while actually employing it throughout. I enjoyed the creative Tabor of the line links down to very few words by the end of the poem. That was a neat little touch up pleasing shape the eye follows as you get further and further into your poem. The subject material was steamy and still incredibly frightening at the same time so this too also has an excellent balance. It’s entertaining ina truly creepy way. So he thinks the word choice is exquisite, right? Then, the next review is: The physical form the poem was nice: in a way, it almost reminded me of the fact that the sinuous coils are coming ever closer to the end... Is this a syllabically measured poem? As in, does each line have a number of syllables that form a pattern? It seems like it would. One of the things that diminished the poem's strength, at least for me, is the high density of words that are considered "literary", such as 'languid' and 'diaphanous'. There are so many, it makes the process of reading and comprehending it, even for someone who knows all those words, maybe more difficult than it needs to be; I didn't get the point of the poem until the ninth or tenth line because the language was so obfuscated. Nonetheless, the poem makes its point (very creepily, I might add). And now I won't be able to sleep tonight. Overall, very good work. They think that the word choice is the weakest part of the poem and actually obfuscated my meaning. I really appreciate both reviewers for taking the time to give me a thoughtful review. I really love that kind of feedback, and I appreciate their encouragement and constructive criticism. But it's funny how two different thoughtful reviewers can come to such opposing conclusions. It really drives home how there isn't anything "right" or "wrong" with the words you put on the page. People just form their own opinions. I used to think that when I received criticism, there was something to fix. And sometimes there still is. But I'm gradually realizing that just because one person doesn't like something, I don't necessarily have to agree/fix. I guess maybe I'm getting to be a competent enough writer that I feel like I can begin to disregard some constructive criticism as long as I don't get too cocky. I'm still pretty new to this writing game. I sometimes get feedback that my syntax is tortured in my poetry to get it to fit a rhyme scheme. And yet, when I read especially some older poetry. Really famous, excellent stuff, it is sometimes pretty tortured. Part of that might have been the language of the day, but I'm fairly certain that some of it isn't just that. They were okay with some tortured syntax. It may well have been intentional. So I've chilled on trying to make everything sound natural. Sometimes natural is boring. Sometimes a little tortured syntax can drive home an image in a way that normal phrasing can't. Sometimes it captures attention in a way that conventional language just isn't as effective at garnering. Anyway, the longer I do this writing thing, the more I realize that not everyone is going to like a style or a way that I do something. Sometimes, it can mean that I have something to fix. And sometimes it's okay as it is. It's someone's opinion that I don't have to share. And best of all--no matter which way I decide to take it, change or no change, I can't be wrong. |
This one's more of a dread kind of thing than really scary, but here it is...
Kudos to Ray on the great prompts. I was too 'fraidy kittenish to watch past the first video because it creeped me out so much! |