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THE STORY
A solider lays flags on graves.
WHAT I LIKED
I liked the emotional sentiment behind the man laying flags on the graves.
POV NARRATION/TENSE
This is told in the 3rd person omniscent. Past tense is used in the story.
DIALOGUE
There is an internal dialogue which accents emotional points.
OPENING PARAGRAPH
The opening paragraph sets the stage for the flag placement. There's a sense of duty, but there's also underlying emotional beat that the reader will soon discover.
CHARACTERS
The man placing the flags finds a deeper meaning to the gesture of placing flags on military graves.
In the middle of summer the heat waves
Long and short defined by the mulberries
Extra care is given to those who saves
Mulberries are ripe to eat wearily
In the middle of summer the heat weeps
Counting down to the last second meltdown
A thunderstorm brews and lingers with leaps
Such a sight to behold and have packed down
In the middle of summer children play
Off and on the merry go round and swings
Tag and soccer as well as other days
Decorating their phones and other blings
Off to go in midsummer days a word
To avoid the dangerous and boredom
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