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THE STORY
A solider lays flags on graves.
WHAT I LIKED
I liked the emotional sentiment behind the man laying flags on the graves.
POV NARRATION/TENSE
This is told in the 3rd person omniscent. Past tense is used in the story.
DIALOGUE
There is an internal dialogue which accents emotional points.
OPENING PARAGRAPH
The opening paragraph sets the stage for the flag placement. There's a sense of duty, but there's also underlying emotional beat that the reader will soon discover.
CHARACTERS
The man placing the flags finds a deeper meaning to the gesture of placing flags on military graves.
Sunny weather rises
Umbrellas put away
Monkeys dance on trees
Minutes stretch to hours of daylight
Everyone parties
Rain in the evenings
Stretches of clouds
Outdoor activities going on
Longest day of the year
Squirrels searching for nuts
Thunderstorms lingers
Ice cream and cake
Children playing outdoors
Everyone watches the unpredictable weather
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