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Angel Feathers

by Amethyst SkellyBones Angel

Rated: 18+ · Book · Writing · #2338096

Brief prose and poetry lacking other categories...

Basically anything under 1500 words. Enjoy

The poem which won 1st place at Rebel Poetry is "Stained Portrait" . I don't usually write in such an overdramatic fashion

The poem which placed second at "Writing 4 Kids" is "Earth is Home" . That is more of my style

The story which placed second at "The Bard's Hall Contest" is "Peg Legs, Parrots and Samurai Swords" . I occasionally write something that might be considered funny...

The story which placed first at "Writing 4 Kids" is "Duck Family Vacation"

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BIG BAD WOLF is Howling

Oct 16, 2025 at 9:14am
In response to "Faith vs Fear"

Nothing quite like Fall, especially Halloween time.

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🦉 Owl-oween

Oct 12, 2025 at 11:36am
In response to "Duck Family Vacation"

This is adorable!

1 Like

SpookyBee

Oct 3, 2025 at 4:56am
In response to "Peg Legs, Parrots and Samurai Swords"

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE STORY

A parrot helps Captain O'Leary solve the Cop Shop Mystery on Founder's Day.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked how Captain O'Leary was inspired to flush the crooks out in the open. True Genius!

POV NARRATION/TENSE

This is told in the 3rd person omniscient. Past tense is used in the story.

DIALOGUE

The dialogue drives the narration.

OPENING PARAGRAPH

The opening paragraph sets up the dilemma who stole the loot. There are a lot of suspects, but some are more suss than others.

CHARACTERS

The characters are highly entertaining and keep the readers engaged. Bingo had to be my favorite, but Brimley and Polly Wanda Cracka were a hoot in their own comedic ways.

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Ned

Sep 17, 2025 at 7:27am
In response to "Loom"

Your poem reminds of a song by Carole King. Our lives truly are a tapestry woven from all our experiences.

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Giant Phantom Jelly

Sep 6, 2025 at 5:06pm
In response to "NICE"

Cool story, I like the way you used the prompt, I would like 2 birthdays in one year but not to be twice as old 😅😅

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iKïyå§amhain

Sep 6, 2025 at 12:27am
In response to "NICE"

Hah! That's an interesting premise indeed.

Not sure about celebrating the birthday's twice in a year though. It's hard enough getting through one alone!
Fun read all around!

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SpookyBee

Sep 2, 2025 at 6:02pm
In response to "Diamonds in the Hills"

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE POEM

The poem took a look at the properties of a mountain.

WHAT I LIKED

As the poem began, I could see myself in a helicopter, flying over the mountain, making my assessments. Great way to put the reader in the moment.

STRUCTURE

This is a diamante poem. The rules involve having 7 seven lines, first and last line, just one word which is a noun, 2nd and 6th lines, 2 words which are adjectives, 3rd and 5th lines have 3 words which are verbs, 4th line has 4 words - nouns. Diamantes don't have to play hard by the rules, but they should take the shape of a diamond.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make it easier to read on WDC.

DESCRIPTIONS

The words used to describe this mountain really gave the mountain it's own look and personality. The use of the word "aiguille," I found an inspired word choice and I had to look it up for it's meaning.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening sets the stage for what to expect from the poem. The title, "Diamonds in the Hills," can be used for the obvious - the mountain is the diamond, but it's word "aiguille" that really fills out the description and makes the diamond take form and shape. Nice word play and expression. The poem followed the prompt and used one of the following words: mountain, beach, or forest. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest.

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Wraithy WiԎchy of Woe!

Aug 13, 2025 at 9:50am
In response to "Raven Snow"

Nice comparison! I am more familiar with Wednesday, but your description of Elsa does have a similar attitude about seeking justice as Wednesday.

Good job!

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Spirit writing 💀🎃📜

Aug 9, 2025 at 9:17am
In response to "Stalled Train"

A beautiful story and memorial told in a personal experience way. Thanks for sharing this and glad I found this 😁! 🎖️🇺🇸🚂🚉.
I love trains and as a kid thought I'd be a conductor on the Ny subway system.

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SpookyBee

Aug 5, 2025 at 10:48am
In response to "Liberty"

Thanks for your story for the Bard's Hall July 2025 contest. You did a good job incorporating the photo prompt into your story. There were good emotional elements in the story that tapped into the heartstrings. The story was sweet, inspirational and ended on a hopeful note. Well done!

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May 3, 2025 at 7:02am

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Stained Portrait

Fadeout—line between good and evil
Drawn jagged within my heart—erased.
I wear a mask each day:
Good girl, proper, angelic.
Never an unclean word escapes.
No one guesses monstrous insanity
lurks beneath:
Fights to the death, scenes of torment,
Dreams I wake up apologizing to God for.
Torn between abhorrence and fascination
I wear conservative values
Protected behind iron bars of fastidious rules.
Who would I become
If I broke out of prison?
Bitter nausea overwhelms my attempt to answer.
Venomous spiders dangle
In unswept corners of my soul.
Nightmares illuminate what I deny.
If I am who I am in the dark,
I refuse to accept myself,
Splintered between decent and dirty
Outcast from my short-circuiting mind
bristling with electric barbed wire,
Chasing cockroaches in circles
under a bloody full moon.
Is uncleanness my identity?
Or is it my struggle, my burden,
I've been assigned to resist?
Enlightenment at tunnel's end,
Or train wreck inexorable?

30 lines, 156 words.
Written for "Rebel Poetry Contest"

Chosen Prompt: The Ballad of Lucy Jordan (written by Shel Silverstein

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