My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
THE STORY
A parrot helps Captain O'Leary solve the Cop Shop Mystery on Founder's Day.
WHAT I LIKED
I liked how Captain O'Leary was inspired to flush the crooks out in the open. True Genius!
POV NARRATION/TENSE
This is told in the 3rd person omniscient. Past tense is used in the story.
DIALOGUE
The dialogue drives the narration.
OPENING PARAGRAPH
The opening paragraph sets up the dilemma who stole the loot. There are a lot of suspects, but some are more suss than others.
CHARACTERS
The characters are highly entertaining and keep the readers engaged. Bingo had to be my favorite, but Brimley and Polly Wanda Cracka were a hoot in their own comedic ways.
Hah! That's an interesting premise indeed.
Not sure about celebrating the birthday's twice in a year though. It's hard enough getting through one alone!
Fun read all around!
My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
THE POEM
The poem took a look at the properties of a mountain.
WHAT I LIKED
As the poem began, I could see myself in a helicopter, flying over the mountain, making my assessments. Great way to put the reader in the moment.
STRUCTURE
This is a diamante poem. The rules involve having 7 seven lines, first and last line, just one word which is a noun, 2nd and 6th lines, 2 words which are adjectives, 3rd and 5th lines have 3 words which are verbs, 4th line has 4 words - nouns. Diamantes don't have to play hard by the rules, but they should take the shape of a diamond.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make it easier to read on WDC.
DESCRIPTIONS
The words used to describe this mountain really gave the mountain it's own look and personality. The use of the word "aiguille," I found an inspired word choice and I had to look it up for it's meaning.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
The opening sets the stage for what to expect from the poem. The title, "Diamonds in the Hills," can be used for the obvious - the mountain is the diamond, but it's word "aiguille" that really fills out the description and makes the diamond take form and shape. Nice word play and expression. The poem followed the prompt and used one of the following words: mountain, beach, or forest. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest.
A beautiful story and memorial told in a personal experience way. Thanks for sharing this and glad I found this 😁! 🎖️🇺🇸🚂🚉.
I love trains and as a kid thought I'd be a conductor on the Ny subway system.
Thanks for your story for the Bard's Hall July 2025 contest. You did a good job incorporating the photo prompt into your story. There were good emotional elements in the story that tapped into the heartstrings. The story was sweet, inspirational and ended on a hopeful note. Well done!
In times of need, I know Who to turn to –
My Savior holds my trembling hand.
Jesus walks with me ev’ry dark night through –
He never fails to understand.
He came, he conquered, waters parted,
And He's here to stay
He won my loss, He paid my cost,
He'll never, ever break.
I am never going “downstairs” – I will praise, I will praise
He saved me because He cares – I will praise, I will praise.
Love me, take me and make me holy
Wash me, enrobe me – you should see the view up here!
Wake me when the circle is unbroken
Wake me when misfortune is unspoken
God's grace is more than sufficient for us all
Trust Him when He says we are invincible…
Inspired by and carefully patterned after the 2024 Imagine Dragons song Gods Don't Pray. As an ID fan, I know where the defiant, faithless tone of their song comes from. It's one I've been obsessed with since it came out, impressed by the precisely measured verses; easy, infectious melody; and overdramatic poetic angst. This poem is not intended as a parody, but rather a respectful reimagining, a response, and a hymn. My dual nature embraces both sides of the coin.
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