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Harlow Flick, Right Fielder

Apr 22, 2025 at 11:37pm
In response to "Quiet after the storms "

Harlow Flick, Right Fielder I tried to take an abstraction and ground it (in concrete?).

Thanks for reading.

Apr 22, 2025 at 12:15pm
In response to "Quiet after the storms "

Atmospheric. Well done.

I particularly like the first stanza.

Katya the Poet

Apr 18, 2025 at 8:50am
In response to "As we rot"

Thanks so much for this poem, and for sharing the story of the dead dog and his beautiful teeth!! (The last line also makes me think of the wolf in the fairy tale Little Red Riding Hood!!) I love the feeling in this, and the praise, and the brevity and the long EE of "teeth" in the last line, making me smile.

Apr 13, 2025 at 12:32pm
In response to "Quiet after the storms "

Joy Oh, I love the bittersweet or dark-and-light although this has more dark.

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Joy

Apr 13, 2025 at 11:34am
In response to "Quiet after the storms "

Very effective lines even with--or maybe because of--the grim in them.

Apr 9, 2025 at 8:57pm
In response to "On a green day"

Cappucine I'll bow to "strangely beautiful".

I just went with the flow. Could use a minor edit but I'm happy that you like it.

Cappucine

Apr 9, 2025 at 8:19pm
In response to "On a green day"

This is strangely beautiful. Thank you for the note about Thailand - I am happy to know this!

Joy

Apr 9, 2025 at 1:56pm
In response to "Make up your mind, Spot! "

Congrats!

I didn't think it was silly, though! I rather thought you were a genius of description.

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Riding the radio waves [230] 24s

Apr 9, 2025 at 1:43pm
In response to "October Blues"

winklett Thank you. Any emotional response is good imho. At my age, and in my situation, I'm surrounded by echoes and embers. Reality is heartless; the Past slips away; the shore of the Future — shrouded in fog.

September 21, 2020 at 11:53pm

#993896

Riding the radio waves

Oscillating
I limp
I melt
like Dalí's clock

surf the waves
of surreal life
this passage of time

© Kåre Enga [177.230] (20.september.2020)

24: 4/2/2/4//3/4/5 free verse

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September 18, 2020 at 7:47pm

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Antique tenor [228] 24σ

Antique tenor

Once limpid —
pools seep,
covered with cataracts.

His falsetto soars;
sometimes truth can only be sung.

© Kåre Enga [177.228] (18.september.2020)

24 syllables: 3/2/6//5/8 free verse
Last line from "The Tenor at the Opera"

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Note to self: it feels a bit oriental like a senryū or tanka.

[Scribbles on paper] A tanka [227]

September 18, 2020 at 12:50am

#993622

Obviously, I'm thinking about Oriental Poetry and Tinker

and concrete_angel, WakeUpAndLive

and all the others!

"I think I've written too much maybe... and then I write more. Six months of going nowhere... even my Muse wants to travel."

Above comment I left for SusanFarmer

in her blog "Journeys"

She's responding to the 30dbc prompts with senryu.

So my response above was 29 syllables ... easier to expand to 31 then clip to 17.

[scribbles on paper]

scribbles on paper
snail-etched — now black swans racing
across a blank screen

six months of going nowhere —
even my Muse craves travel

© Kåre Enga [177.227] (16.september.2020)

So I write a tanka (English syllables 5/7/5 7/7). Concrete images in the first part; a response in the second. "Screen" is a modern word. "Sky" would be too cliche imho. If an image of a computer screen were used then "sky" would be better. See: haiga, https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Haiga

Further notes gleaned from the internet:

http://abritishprofinjapan.blogspot.com/2017/06/rain-snails-Japanese-animal-name...

Snail is "katatsumuri (カタツムリ), is usually written in katakana but does have kanji (蝸牛)."
https://wkdkigodatabase03.blogspot.com/2007/03/snail-katatsumuri.html
Perhaps an image of rainy season? (summer = May, June, July)

Black swan = hakuchoo (any season)

Seasonal words (kigo): http://www.2hweb.net/haikai/renku/500ESWd.html

Also: https://youngleaves.org/?page_id=98
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/List_of_kigo
https://worldkigodatabase.blogspot.com/search?updated-max=2013-12-29T03:50:00%2B...

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We are the Global Cloak [226b] 24σ

September 16, 2020 at 11:11pm

#993530

We are the Global Cloak

woven from castes, creeds, our cloths of many colors,
the plenary inspiration of this planet.

© Kåre Enga [177.226b] (16.september.2020)

24 syllable couplet: 12/12 alliteration, no rhyme.

plenary: in the sense of everyone gathered.
cloak: in the sense of coat, shield, protection.

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September 16, 2020 at 10:40pm

#993523

O Ye Born Again! [226a]

O Ye Born Again!

We are the plenary inspiration of this world,
not you who seek to divide us into caste, creed or color.

© Kåre Enga [177.226a] (16.september.2020)

28 syllables.

Caste: the Gospel of Prosperity.
Creed: the intrareligious squabbles and demonization of other religious belefs.
Color: the refusal to embrace people-of-color as members of their family.

From NPR: "For many, the Gospel is more about the need for personal salvation than the duty to address societal ills."

Basically, White Evangelicals are racist, so they aren't bothered by that.

"White evangelicals love Trump and aren't confused about why. No one should be."

https://www.nbcnews.com/think/opinion/white-evangelicals-love-trump-aren-t-confu...

From elsewhere:

Therefore, the phrase “verbal plenary inspiration” means that all parts of the Bible, as well as every Word of the Bible, says exactly what God wanted said.

Biblical inspiration is the doctrine in Christian theology that the human authors and editors of the Bible were led or influenced by God with the result that their writings may be designated in some sense the word of God.

Soaking in your tub [225] 24σ

September 13, 2020 at 9:51pm

#993287

Soaking in your tub

Let salts draw out this poison; drain me of all care.
Foment my breast with jasmine; flush away my fear.

© Kåre Enga [177.225] (13.september.2020)

24 syllables: a couplet 12/12 aa but could be quatrain 7/5/7/5 with xaxa rhyme.

Foment, pronunced 'foMENT':

verb: bathe with warm water or medicated lotions
Example: "His legs should be fomented"
verb: try to stir up public opinion

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American Haiku ... ish [224]

September 11, 2020 at 7:28pm

#993092

Is this a haiku? A Japanese haiku? No. An American haiku? Maybe.

One cherry blossom
settles on a toddler's nose:
first tears now giggles.

© Kåre Enga [177.224] (12.oktober.2020)

1. length (11-17max) = 17 syllables is so American... will you forgive me.

2. cutting word (two parts) = punctation

3. nature/season word = spring (cherry blossom)

4. observation, no emotion provided = ? seems okay as the emotion response is observed and doesn't come from the poet. ("she crosses her eyes" may be better.)

5: does this (juxtaposition of two parts) evoke emotion = maybe

6: overall = may be okay

My use of symbols:

= success. (cutting: 2 parts not 1 nor 3)

= may be okay or acceptable. (length = 11-17max)

= prose not poetry, abstract not concrete.

= fail (white is the color of death in the Far East)

Seasons:

= spring

= summer

= autumn

=winter

or something similar and natural:

May denote a season...

... except in Ireland or anywhere without a dry season.

... except in Chicago, Wichita, Buffalo or anywhere it's windy.

... maybe spring (March-June) in Oklahoma.

... end of autumn in the North; end of summer in Costa Rica.

a symbol of winter (January) in Japan. No particular season in Seattle nor elsewhere but associated more with winter.

spring-early summer in Kansas. (April-May-June)

dry summer in the plains. (August)

spring after the daffodils (March-April-May)

tulips aren't blue ... just saying.

fruit harvest (June-July)

is this a sunflower? If so, end-ofsummer (August-September)

summer ... if you are lucky.

autumn.

autumn harvest (September-October)

A calendar symbol (tend to be abstract) seldom based on nature:

November 1-2, Day of the Dead in Montana. But not everywhere.

Halloween. (pumpkin is seasonal)

Christmas. (a tree would be seasonal)

Easter or Christian.

Chanukah.

Natural but not seasonal:

Some bugs are ... but roaches aren't seasonal.

not ... unless you have surfing season or storms. (typhoons)

either you have it or you don't. Not very seasonal unless you have wet/dry seasons. In Costa Rica this would be January-March while

would be October.

September 11, 2020 at 3:48pm

#993078

Minimalist [225] 24σ

Minimalist

I'm not a sonnet
—too many syl-
lables, they clutter.

I'm the progeny
of Diogenes.

© Kåre Enga [177.225] (11.september.2020)

24: 5/4/5 5/5

Note: Diogenes (the cynic) is 4 syllables.

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Breakfast for Tiffany's [221] 24σ,

September 8, 2020 at 6:23pm

#992803

Breakfast at Tiffany's

She cooked him eggs and bacon,
traveled for twenty years, their worldwide gest—
till she broiled him in Macon.

© Kåre Enga [177.221] (9.september.2020)

24σ: 7/10/7 axa

GEST 1 : a tale of adventures especially : a romance in verse. 2 : adventure, exploit knightly gests

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[white-grey ashes choke] a tanka [219b]

September 7, 2020 at 8:34pm

#992671

white-grey ashes choke
this heat-filled valley — poplars
flame in shades of gold

I turn to watch potatoes
start to sizzle on the stove

© Kåre Enga [177.219b] (14.september.2020)

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