Erotica Harem

Hmmm, that's a tough question, Carol. I wonder, and this is just a suggestion, mind you, and it may shorten it's length, but that's okay, because it's long enough to handle it. What if you just take out that scene? The reason why I mention this is because Val didn't speak with anyone about his plans to go in search of new pets.

Gideon is a great name and I love it -- please don't change it. Herman, however, stopped me, and I chuckled out loud, thinking that all the other names were so great, but Herman just seemed so ... common, know what I mean? Val doesn't need to reveal himself (he doesn't in Traci's, LB and Zane's or Sasha}. He goes by other names right until the end of each of their stories. I kinda like the mystery to it. And you are right on the path as everyone else, Carol. Gideon is perfect to come calling on Greg. I just have to continue reading to learn how and why arrogance plays into it. Greg doesn't seem "arrogant" to me but then, I've only read the first portion. I'll try to pick this up later tonight, time permitting, of course.

So, how are you doing? I do apologize for not getting back to Janelle. My YA forum has been hopping, not to mention my own writing and revising. It just doesn't stop, does it?

Hug,
Dusk