This is SO GOOD! Wow, you certainly have a gift for words!
I especially liked your first two stanzas:
You, not flesh and bone,
yet hungry as an orphan
seeking love from strangers
who smile.
You, begging me to feed you
words, only words, but your insistence
keeps me up at night, like a child
afraid of the dark
Great lines!
And though I did like Version 2, I think I liked Version 3 the best.
Glad you are doing this, too! The more the merrier!
~Cubby ")
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Go throw your TV set away,
And in its place you can install,
A lovely bookshelf on the wall."
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