Noticing Newbies

Heyo.
A friend referred me to this website. I guess he think I have some half-decent work. Anyway, username's: halex_grimm, pen-name's: A. O'Laogaire. Check me out if you want, you guys can (please) give me some feedback on my working piece, "The Phoenix Effect". Thanks a lot and nice to meet y'all.
Peace.
- halex_grimm
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"A tale of love, hate, passion, and pain that plays in the haze of gray where nothing follows the rules and everything is hidden."