WDC Frontliners Novel Review forum

Plot - Dixim uses conquers his magic and brings rain

Setting - Inn in Chole

Characters - Dixim, Alastair, Gabriel

Overall - Well done. This kept my attention from first word to last. Dixim conquered his magic and brought much needed rain to the city of Chole. In so doing it sapped all his strength, but also made him increasingly hungry. He was relieved to find the soldier and the magicker hadn't come to harm him, but help, while he wondered what their real motive is.

Gabriel isn't far behind as he pauses in the rain to look on the body of the guard he killed, wondering what it was he was doing. He seems to have lost sight of his purpose.

Grammar, style, and errors. The grammar is holding up true to form. There were no spelling errors that I detected.


** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **

Invalid Item  This item number is not valid. #1579458 by Not Available.

** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **

Nothing is impossible when God is in it.
I can face tomorrow because God is in my life today.

Matthew 19:26 But Jesus beheld them, and said unto them, With men this is impossible; but with God all things are possible.
(KJV)

It is hard to fail, but it is worse never to have tried to succeed. -- President Teddy Roosevelt

http://just4him.webs.com