Show and Tell Contest

I agree with Tim's comment. Action-->reaction is so important. I also agree that these two lines together are showing.

I think the reason this line gets flagged is that it seems tacked on: it doesn't appear to be in character's point of view, and hence feels like an author intrusion. For example, if it read, "He sought refuge in nature...", then the character is acting, and nature is his target. I'm sure one could tweak it further if it were critical to suggest that nature "always soothed his aching heart." Maybe one could just say he's "waiting for nature to soothe his aching heart, as it always had in the past." Again, this puts you in Jack's head, waiting, rather than stating a disconnected fact.

Just my $0.02 worth.

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