I moved/deleted the two chapters that followed on "His Brother's Keeper" , then replaced the first of them with a near-duplicate of the original. That area, which has Patterson impersonating/controlling Frank and Joe Durras, is a tricky one, which is why I've never been back to it.
But I saw a chance to improve the end of that particular spot. Back when those chapters were posted, you could only give a chapter two choices, and so I wrote "The New Members" and "The New Seniors" very narrowly. "Senior Secrets" still ends with only new choices, but the ending is designed to open out to allow a lot more choice. I might be back later today or tomorrow with some short chapters setting up possibilities.
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