April Entry: Meditation by MST
Comments/review as judge:
Following the form was okay:
- strong introduction
- 3 paragraphs that each focused on a different element
- conclusion that felt out of place
The conclusion didn’t really tie the three body paragraphs together and involved extra autobiography instead.
Technically, just a few things – Joyfully capitalised, misused periods in a couple of places – but generally fine.
You gave done an excellent job describing how to meditate. Comprehensive and comprehensible – well done.
It’s that ending )and the use of the term “knuckle heads”) that let this down. 4 stars
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