Hello Breezy,

I don't know a lot about poetry actually next to nothing but I can tell you what I like and the impressions I get from a piece.

That said, I like this poem/poems. I don't know if this is a style or structure or whatever but I love the back and forth aspect to it.

The language is lovely and the images they conjure are beautiful. I do have one small suggestion however. The line:



I would change to: pinkish orange simply because the word "pinky" has a comedic sound to it. It's very cartoonish and the rest of the poem is quite eloquent. It seems out of character to me.

Other than that I like everything about the poems. Thank you for sharing them and I look forward to reading more from you in the future.


My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .



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